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by KappaP
April 18th, 2010, 3:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE DRIFTER - Query
Replies: 14
Views: 2087

Re: THE DRIFTER - Query

Hey Shadow! I think this sounds really interesting and you've done a good job making this concise-- (I think) it's always easier to add than it is to figure out how to further reduce! Here are a few things I spotted: Taking all your guys' great advice into consideration, here is my revision: Dear ....
by KappaP
April 15th, 2010, 5:02 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do your reading habits influence your writing?
Replies: 13
Views: 4824

Re: How do your reading habits influence your writing?

Ha, this is actually something I thought about a lot while writing. I read a lot while writing my ms and, when I reread my it, I can see bits and pieces of the stylistic choices of those authors working their way into my own prose. The parts I wrote while reading Lolita tend to be more narrator-focu...
by KappaP
April 15th, 2010, 4:50 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: What are your pet peeves about your own writing?
Replies: 27
Views: 4309

Re: What are your pet peeves about your own writing?

The linguist in me HAS to describe body language when in dialogue. I can't not do it. When I finished my ms it was almost 130K.... now it's at 104K and honestly 80% of what I took out was just descriptions of what people were doing with hands, expressions, etc. Had to find ways to incorporate those ...
by KappaP
April 14th, 2010, 6:04 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Full Manuscript, Hard Copy
Replies: 2
Views: 765

Full Manuscript, Hard Copy

Should I spiral bind this baby or send it with only a binder clip? Is there protocol for that? I haven't come across any in my searching of the interwebs, but I don't want to do it wrong. I feel a little iffy about only binder clipping since it's a ton of pages, but am not sure if agents tend not to...
by KappaP
April 13th, 2010, 4:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: A BEAUTIFUL MONSTER
Replies: 20
Views: 2906

Re: Query: A BEAUTIFUL MONSTER

I know this is NOT what you want to hear-- but I read that and really struggled to find ways that it differed from Twilight. A different supernatural beast, yes..... but the tortured boyfriend, the second-fiddle-great-guy love interest (...who turns out to be a wolf). Who is the book about, what cho...
by KappaP
April 12th, 2010, 3:32 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: VALENTINE, New Revision & stuff
Replies: 33
Views: 4902

Re: Query: VALENTINE

It's difficult because, unlike in genre fiction I think, these things aren't directly linked with plot, like through a conspiracy or a quest or anything, they're only connected through theme. Whew! Do I ever know what you mean... literary fiction is god-awful to write queries for. When I posted my q...
by KappaP
April 9th, 2010, 2:19 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: adding a second POV
Replies: 9
Views: 1608

Re: adding a second POV

It depends, I think. Someone earlier used the phrase "all-in" and I think that's a very good way of putting it. You can't just throw in a few chapters from the perspective of a totally new character that I have no attachment too and expect me to go along with it. You know how important it is for a r...
by KappaP
April 9th, 2010, 3:13 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised query, Paranormal romance, I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU AN
Replies: 6
Views: 1255

Re: Revised query, Paranormal romance, I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU AN

Again I say thanks for your comments. I always fight with myself over how much to tell and still make the agent want to know more. In my story the man who tries to kill her escapes from prison and comes back at the end of the novel, making one last attempt to kill her...of course no spell worth its...
by KappaP
April 8th, 2010, 1:42 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new query for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, PLEASE HELP
Replies: 5
Views: 1123

Re: new query for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, PLEASE HELP

I'm being slowly tortured by the Query Demon....so any help, suggestions will be appreciated. I have no problems with criticism, so do your best. (Just a note on the word count. when I completed the first draft it was 134,000 words...I never tell a short story...and I've revised to 103,000). maybe ...
by KappaP
April 8th, 2010, 1:31 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Help with Synopsis!! Please Help!
Replies: 6
Views: 1935

Re: Help with Synopsis!! Please Help!

I know it was fast! and yes I know its full of typos. I just wanted to get something out there that had decent material. The typos I'll fix later, the content is what I'm worried about. I'm just looking for feedback on the material. Honestly, I took one look at that wall of text with typo after typ...
by KappaP
April 7th, 2010, 1:13 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Replying to a rejection?? Any thoughts on this?
Replies: 6
Views: 1360

Re: Replying to a rejection?? Any thoughts on this?

I've never read anything by an agent that expresses anything but hatred for when writers do this. Do it if you want, but I always see it pop up in agents' lists of annoyances. We like to think they don't ask for many partials, but some do and you shouldn't assume that they have the time to respond p...
by KappaP
April 7th, 2010, 8:07 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Novel Length
Replies: 17
Views: 3260

Re: Novel Length

I'm in lit fic too, and honestly it's hard to sell anything over 120 or 130 at MOST. There are always exceptions, but don't bank on being an exception. When I finished my ms it was 129K. I thought "I can edit, but there's not much I can really take out." Sent out a few queries. No go. Went through a...
by KappaP
April 7th, 2010, 4:16 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
Replies: 8
Views: 1506

Re: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy

Hey Charity! I've actually kept up with your first 13s evolution over on Hatrack, and I'll say it's definitely gotten a lot stronger so props! Overall, I think this is quite good and I only have a few nitpicks and then a general suggestion. The 2nd and 3rd sentences I think should be combined to giv...
by KappaP
March 22nd, 2010, 3:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Critique - Overcast Shadows - First Try
Replies: 27
Views: 3655

Re: Query Critique - Overcast Shadows - First Try

I think this is fantastic, very good improvements and you polished it up nicely. Good luck on the agent hunt!
by KappaP
March 22nd, 2010, 4:07 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Critique - Overcast Shadows - First Try
Replies: 27
Views: 3655

Re: Query Critique - Overcast Shadows - First Try

Bam-- fantastic revision. Just very minor tweaks. You did really well with weaving the TIya thing in there without it distracting. Dear Agent, Vitiosus is the prince of the Lasserta, a nation inhabited by cold-blooded Unless they are reptiles, I think "cold-hearted" would be clearer beings striving ...