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- December 17th, 2010, 8:51 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: Look at what you're missing, Nathan
- Replies: 8
- Views: 6604
Re: Look at what you're missing, Nathan
Clicked on the link, and the message said the post was deleted by the author. Or possibly his keeper.
- November 3rd, 2010, 9:02 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
- Replies: 41
- Views: 14089
Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query
I really like this, and I would read it. Caveat: I just read Angelology, so the concept of the Nephilim may make more sense to me than it might to others. If you get further questions like who the heck are these Nephilim, anyway, consider a little more detail. It sounds like a fascinating, and, I th...
- November 3rd, 2010, 8:48 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: The Soul Baby the Trickster and the Golden Buddha
- Replies: 21
- Views: 8238
Re: Query: The Soul Baby the Trickster and the Golden Buddha
Overall, I loved your query. In fact, I picked it to critique because of the very cool title. And I have a lot of familiarity with the subject. I think Quill did a fine job of finding the specific nits. I have a more general comment. If this is a true story and you are in fact the Michael of the que...
- October 25th, 2010, 8:04 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE HEART OF BELDESSARIO - Fantasy (Newer Draft on page 2)
- Replies: 15
- Views: 6796
Re: Query: THE HEART OF BELDESSARIO - Fantasy (second attempt)
I read a much earlier version of this, and you have here a greatly improved version. The only thing I'd like to see is how Tessa tips the balance for the water wizard--not vast detail--just a phrase. It would up the ante. Congratulations for staying with this. I've taken a short vacation from my own...
- October 25th, 2010, 7:55 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: The SQUEE GOOD NEWS Thread
- Replies: 356
- Views: 171833
Re: The SQUEE GOOD NEWS Thread
Congratulations to everyone who has posted good news. And I love the idea of a good news category. We can't have too much of that.
- October 5th, 2010, 8:32 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Speculative Sci/Fan Query - FREE TO FORGIVE
- Replies: 12
- Views: 4794
Re: Speculative Sci/Fan Query - FREE TO FORGIVE
I agree fully with the comments above and I also think this sounds like a fantastic book. I'm very eager to see how you revise the query.
- October 4th, 2010, 8:23 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
- Replies: 24
- Views: 9558
Re: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
Hi, androidblues, and thanks for your comment. Annie doesn't know Dara is her mother. Her adoptive father wasn't an alcoholic when he adopted her. The Dara version was getting way too problematic. After reading a particularly vehement post on Shark Query about never telling the whole story in a quer...
- October 4th, 2010, 8:05 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: Agents/Interns Tweeting Query Comments
- Replies: 21
- Views: 9832
Re: Agents/Interns Tweeting Query Comments
With all due respect to those who aren't bothered by it/find it educational - this makes me so mad, I can barely post about it. I hope we can all still be friends. *BE AWARE - WHAT FOLLOWS IS A RANT* I find it not only unprofessional, but shockingly inappropriate. I believe it's demeaning and degra...
- October 2nd, 2010, 8:27 pm
- Forum: Self-Publishing
- Topic: Snooki has a book deal.
- Replies: 19
- Views: 6630
Re: Snooki has a book deal.
Does that mean she knows how to read?
- October 2nd, 2010, 8:23 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: Agents/Interns Tweeting Query Comments
- Replies: 21
- Views: 9832
Re: Agents/Interns Tweeting Query Comments
my opinion is it's unprofessional. Imagine doctors tweeting about their pain-in-the ass patients. I have a retail business, and there are times I'd like to publicly let off steam about difficult customers, but I don't. It's not a matter of outing someone's stupidity; it's a question of whether you r...
- October 1st, 2010, 8:23 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7266
Re: THE REMEDY -2nd try at page bottom- Women's upmarket fiction
I agree pretty thoroughly with Remmik's comments. The main problem I'm having with this query is that, just as I'm getting intrigued, I get thrown off and confused. Part of it may be that the POV goes back and forth. Have you tried writing it exclusively from one or the other's POV? Or one paragraph...
- September 30th, 2010, 7:46 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
- Replies: 24
- Views: 9558
Re: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
Thanks so much. That's very clear and helpful. I appreciate your taking the time to give me specific examples.
- September 30th, 2010, 5:30 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Whip-Slip query
- Replies: 68
- Views: 20203
Re: The Whip-Slip query
This is a huge improvement. Congratulations for persisting. It gives me hope:)
In this version, the psychological complexities and torments Thea endures become more intriguing. This is a book I would definitely read.
In this version, the psychological complexities and torments Thea endures become more intriguing. This is a book I would definitely read.
- September 30th, 2010, 5:24 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
- Replies: 24
- Views: 9558
Re: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
Hi, Polly, I appreciate your taking the time to read this query. I am familiar with acting techniques or mis-techniques, so "indicating" is an unfamiliar concept to me. I can guess what you're referring to, and I might even be right. Could you give me one example of where I do this in the ...
- September 30th, 2010, 11:20 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
- Replies: 24
- Views: 9558
Re: The Drunkard's Daughter: An updated Revision on pg. 2
I have completely rewritten this, using a different protagonist. Dara McBride has always relegated the subject of her adoptive granddaughter’s birth mother to the realm of Great Unmentionables, along with the true nature of Annie’s relationship with her "roommate" and how she got pregnant ...