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by gdelao
August 31st, 2010, 12:46 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 184511

Re: Ask Nathan

Hi Nathan, I also am querying you from a Comcast account. Both query and forwarded query was from Comcast. Would you consider accepting my query as an attachment also? I don't want to send it until I hear the OK from you. Maybe the correlation between Cali and I would be Comcast? Thank you for your ...
by gdelao
August 30th, 2010, 8:21 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 184511

Re: Ask Nathan

Hi Nathan, Just like Cali, who posted before me, I originally queried you on the 21st, after learning about your server issues, I forwarded my original query on the 26th morning (just like you asked me to). I used the same email address I sent it from originally. Could I be stuck in the ever growing...
by gdelao
August 26th, 2010, 2:38 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 184511

Re: Ask Nathan

Oh man Nathan, I queried you last Saturday, the 21st, around 2pm and I haven't heard from you. I read over your blog today and noticed you said you answered all the queries as of yesterday 6pm. If I query you again, like you told Anonymous to do, should I mentioned I queried you a couple of days ag...
by gdelao
August 26th, 2010, 12:49 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 184511

Re: Ask Nathan

Oh man Nathan, I queried you last Saturday, the 21st, around 2pm and I haven't heard from you. I read over your blog today and noticed you said you answered all the queries as of yesterday 6pm. If I query you again, like you told Anonymous to do, should I mentioned I queried you a couple of days ago...
by gdelao
July 23rd, 2010, 12:15 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 184511

Re: Ask Nathan

Nathan, I don't have a question, it's a comment. I want to thank you for being an active, open and helpful person to all of us who are working hard to improve our craft. Thank you for creating this space and keeping the expectations high. I have met some of the most engaging, helpful, and just down ...
by gdelao
July 22nd, 2010, 11:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**

That's immensely improved from the first draft. All the pieces seem to be in the right places, especially the weighting and nuances in the emotional timeline. There are still places where the wording could stand to be smoothed a bit, but you've come a long way. I suggest sleeping on it for a couple...
by gdelao
July 22nd, 2010, 10:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 3**

Dear (Agent), Wilson Mooney has been in boarding schools since she was eight years old. She is conveniently pessimistic, brilliantly witty, and regrettably, after her grandfather’s untimely death, all alone in this world. She looks forward to turning eighteen in a month--a birthday she wishes would ...
by gdelao
July 22nd, 2010, 8:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**

Dear (Agent), Wilson Mooney has been in boarding schools since she was eight years old. She is conveniently pessimistic I still don't get how being pessimistic is convenient... , brilliantly witty, and regrettably, after her grandfather’s untimely death, all alone in this world. She looks forward t...
by gdelao
July 22nd, 2010, 8:15 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**

Wilson Mooney has been in boarding schools since she was eight years old. She is conveniently pessimistic, brilliantly witty, and regrettably, after her grandfather’s untimely death, all alone in this world. She looks forward to turning eighteen in a month, a birthday she wishes would hurry up and ...
by gdelao
July 22nd, 2010, 4:40 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**

Okay, so here is the second updated query. Thank you so much for all the input, I really do appreciate the help you all have given me. I am ready to have it broken down again! Dear (Agent), Wilson Mooney has been in boarding schools since she was eight years old. She is conveniently pessimistic, bri...
by gdelao
July 22nd, 2010, 12:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult

Wilson Mooney has been in boarding schools since she was eight years old. She is conveniently pessimistic, brilliantly witty, and regrettably, after her grandfather’s untimely death, all alone in this world. She looks forward to turning eighteen in a month, a birthday she is desperate to hurry and ...
by gdelao
July 21st, 2010, 10:40 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult

Hello Great Query Polishers of NB Forums! Dear (Agent), Wilson Mooney has been in boarding schools since she was eight years old. She is conveniently pessimistic how is being pessimistic convenient? , brilliantly witty, and regrettably, after her grandfather’s untimely death, all alone in this worl...
by gdelao
July 21st, 2010, 10:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Re: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult

Wilson Mooney has been in boarding schools since she was eight years old. She is conveniently pessimistic, brilliantly witty, and regrettably, after her grandfather’s untimely death, all alone in this world. This sentence doesn't really give us much character insight, and the effects of her granfat...
by gdelao
July 21st, 2010, 5:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**
Replies: 17
Views: 2872

Query- Wilson Mooney- Young Adult **Updated Query 2**

Hello Great Query Polishers of NB Forums! I would love it if I could get some feedback on my query for my young adult novel, Wilson Mooney. I was so nervous to put this out, but after hanging around Nathan's Forum for a little while now, I see that he has the coolest, most down to earth, and helpful...
by gdelao
July 19th, 2010, 1:05 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 274695

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Wilson Mooney Genre: young adult I wish I could remember my childhood. The vivid memories and revealing words just don’t work for me. I remembered small pieces, chunks of events that took up residence in my head, but details of who took whom to the fifth grade dance or how it felt when Christ...