Nathan Bransford - The Forums

I'll give it a try! I should mention, this is non fiction, a travel memoir: I was there to meet a prince. It was surprising even before you considered I was from a country that didn’t have a monarchy. The palace guard looked as skeptical about it as I was, and didn’t hide a snicker as he eyed my pat...

I've read Bryson's Notes On a Small Island, and I love it. Definitely a good place to look for inspiration! Thanks for all the feedback, I'm revising now.

Thanks for the thoughts Quill. It looks like I could stand to do some condensing here. Also, it hadn't occurred to me that the references to other places I visited while abroad might be confusing. ANyone else have thoughts on this?

Thanks again!

Thanks very much Dankrubis! As you are now officially the first person to comment on my query, it's nice to hear I may be hitting the right tone. Your comments make a lot of sense, and I'll definitiely be using some of them to revise. Thanks again! I'd love to hear others' thoughts on the blog line....

Hi all! This is my first draft of a query for my travel memoir, English Lessons. As this is in its first stages, I would appreciate any and all thoughts! Thanks! Dear [agent], I’m seeking representation for my travel memoir, English Lessons: An American Girl’s Quest to Become British in 52 Weeks . I...

Thanks very much for the comments Nick. I'm originally from Fort Lauderdale, living in DC these days though. I agree with a lot of what you had to say. I'm playing around with the opening line now, it's really refreshing to see your work from someone else's point of view. I'm definitely going to tak...

Thanks mnaylor, I appreciate it. I like the idea of changing the opening, been playing around with not opening with dialogue. I don't want the reader to be confused about what's happening, because I haven't set it up properly. Thoughts anyone?

Hi Nick, appreciate the encouragement to join in. I've left a few comments so far as I learn the type of feedback people are looking for here. I'm currently working on a second draft for my narrative non-fiction ms, called English Lessons. It's about a year I spent in London writing a column about a...

Hi there! I'm new to the boards, and after reading some great excerpts and commenting on a few, I felt inspired to share a bit from my manuscript. This is the beginning of chapter one of my narrative non-fiction ms, called English Lessons. Thanks in advance for any comments, I haven't had too many p...

I like this second excerot a lot, it feels like more unique description than the original excerpt. If the first excerpt is still being used as the intro for the whole ms, I would suggest maybe focusing more on the character of Timothy in those first few paragraphs. It was a bit difficult to know whi...

Hi there! This is my first post but thought I'd give my two cents anyway. I'm a fan of the second opening, as I think it reads more polished. But I also like some of what you did in the first opening, like the action I could feel in reading the character's driving habits. Maybe you could work the tw...