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- January 11th, 2011, 3:03 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: (Un)Realistic young character dialogue
- Replies: 45
- Views: 11847
I skimmed through the replies and I didn't see anyone mentioning this, so I thought I would bring it up. I think the key in making this character sound precocious and not stilted or unrealistic is by balancing the character with a more realistic, developmentally average character. For instance, A Wr...
- January 11th, 2011, 2:39 am
- Forum: Town Hall
- Topic: The Introduction Thread
- Replies: 629
- Views: 236078
Hi everyone, I like coffee. A lot. Writing gives me time to go get a cup without my kids. I like books as much as I like coffee, but is easier to read with children hanging on you than drink coffee due to the threat of third degree burns, That's why coffee gets top billing in my intro: its unattaina...
- January 11th, 2011, 2:27 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Forty Winks first page -YA paranormal adventure
- Replies: 9
- Views: 2890
I'm going to chime in and reiterate there's too much backstory, The creepy sister is attention grabbing, open with that, cut all the exposition and layer those details into your first 50 pages. I would start with a sentence or two showing he's disoriented, have him move to explore, intro the sister ...
- January 11th, 2011, 1:45 am
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 305633
TITLE: Crewel GENRE: YA Dystopian WORD COUNT: 248 They came for me in the night. Once, my mother told me, families had fought them, neighbors coming to their aid. People died, which sort of missed the point. Now that peace was established and the Loom proven, people did not fight them. They still co...