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by allegedauthor
January 17th, 2011, 1:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Jade's Hurricane back from rejection
Replies: 12
Views: 2216

Re: Query: Jade's Hurricane back from rejection

I agree that your hook needs to "show" a little bit more. What does it look like when her powers control her? Great idea for a query but the conflict could be fleshed out a bit more. Good luck!
by allegedauthor
January 8th, 2011, 12:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY
Replies: 12
Views: 1971

Re: SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY

Thanks all for your help! I'm busy revamping the query. YOU ROCK!
by allegedauthor
January 7th, 2011, 12:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY
Replies: 12
Views: 1971

Re: SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY

Thanks for the help! Meredith: I will try and put some personalization about Heidi. Good call! I researched this and it is paranormal. Anything having to do with sucking souls/demons/etc. and not on a different plane or world. If I put fantasy or horror that will have a WHOLE different meaning to ag...
by allegedauthor
January 7th, 2011, 12:12 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY
Replies: 12
Views: 1971

Re: SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY

How is this? Twelve-year-old Heidi Meyers wants nothing more than to have fun fooling around in class. Did someone say substitute teacher equals no work? Heck, yeah! However, Mrs. Podge has other plans for Heidi and her classmates. One by one, she’s stealing the souls from unsuspecting seventh grade...
by allegedauthor
January 7th, 2011, 10:35 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY
Replies: 12
Views: 1971

SOUL SURVIVORS: PARANORMAL QUERY

Hiya! I'm look for help with my query. Soul Survivors is a working title since there are other works by th same name. I need to know if it's clear enough and if I use the word soul too much! Any other crits would be greatly appreciated! NEW QUERY IN POST #3!! Twelve-year-old Heidi Meyers wants nothi...
by allegedauthor
January 6th, 2011, 2:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: MAGE STORM Middle Grade Fantasy--Revised
Replies: 7
Views: 1728

Re: QUERY: MAGE STORM Middle Grade Fantasy

I've been absent for a while, polishing up this project and working on a couple of others. Dear Agent: The only traces of magic left in Rell's world are the violent, semi-sentient mage storms made up of the ashes of the magic-wielders killed in the great war. Or so Rell believes until a mage storm ...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 10:01 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: We're not just writers, share your artistic talents!
Replies: 62
Views: 13077

Re: We're not just writers, share your artistic talents!

I can draw...kind of. I'm definitely not up to par with the people here though! My artistic talent is less tactile. I sing opera and performed on stage and on tour with a college choir. Other than that, I got nada!
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 9:45 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 618
Views: 196121

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hi all! I'm just getting started on this forum. I've already critiqued quite a few things and am enjoying reading everyone's hard work! I'll be posting my query for all of you to rip into once I'm done with my MG novel. Until then don't be surprised to find me haunting your posts. Happy New Year!
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 9:38 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Flash Backs in a novel, good or bad?
Replies: 5
Views: 1095

Re: Flash Backs in a novel, good or bad?

I think flashbacks are great when they are done seamlessly. You don't want to jar your reader. One of the best series of flashbacks I've ever read is Stephen King's IT . Almost half the novel consists of flashbacks, but you wouldn't notice because he never pulls you out of the main conflict. I don't...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 9:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Lost Cargo *updated version*
Replies: 10
Views: 1612

Re: Lost Cargo *updated version*

Thanks, sbs_mjc1. I appreciate your feedback. Some of the phrasing could be better, but does this draft seem to be going in the right direction? *Updated version* When college students Travis Maguire, Lexie Collins, and her brother Burke find the wreck of a black triangular aircraft in an isolated ...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 9:15 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: VERSION 6 REVISED: Query: Awakening
Replies: 21
Views: 3538

Re: REVISED: Query: Awakening

I just have one question: what will happen if Amanda stays? What is she fighting against? You give a great background of her but what will be the ultimate trial? Is it just the love triangle or something darker? Also, you might want to insert Amanda's last name into the query. :) I think this could ...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 9:09 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: DARK, DARK LUCK, a YA urban Fantasy
Replies: 12
Views: 2059

Re: DARK, DARK LUCK, a YA urban Fantasy

Thanks Emily and A La Vanille. I've taken your suggestions and rewritten this for clarity. Hope it is better. Explaining things like the Wild Magic would kill the mystery, so i left them. Thank you again. Revision 3... Dear agent, Cash Flaherty is fed up with his small Texas town and the office-bou...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 9:01 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Plot outline
Replies: 3
Views: 1781

Re: Plot outline

I have scrapped the original WIP and started fresh with a new perspective. Here is the new plot outline, Sans Finis. Let me know what you think. Plot outline After the death of his wife, Alex Mendez has raised his daughter, who is now 16, alone. His job, as a violent crimes detective, has kept him ...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:56 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Helpful Synopsis Worksheet
Replies: 5
Views: 3147

Re: Helpful Synopsis Worksheet

This is great! Thank you so much!
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:55 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis: "The Princess and the Pirate" (9-14 year olds)
Replies: 8
Views: 2793

Re: Synopsis: "The Princess and the Pirate" (9-14 year olds)

I would market this as upper MG if you feel it contains scenes that would appeal to older kids but not enough to be true YA. It is a market that is steadily growing right now. Upper MG can encompass 9-14 if the plot is violent enough. But never base anything on age because What Jaime Saw was meant f...