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by Natasha
January 9th, 2011, 1:07 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Need a Critique Partner for my YA novel!
Replies: 4
Views: 1495

Need a Critique Partner for my YA novel!

I am willing to exchange the full novel, first chapters, first fifty chapters--whatever you want to do (if you want your work critiqued as well), My novel is a paranormal romance/adventure (no vamps, werewolves, zombies, and alot of other things lol) Please read my synopsis below and let me know if ...
by Natasha
October 14th, 2010, 7:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY - A Scorpion's Nature
Replies: 8
Views: 1401

Re: QUERY - A Scorpion's Nature

IMHO, I think the query is perfect as is.

And even if it's not perfect, it was good enough to make me want to read it. I think that's the goal right?
by Natasha
October 14th, 2010, 7:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Young Adult Fantasy Query
Replies: 22
Views: 2920

Re: Young Adult Fantasy Query

Hi, this is my first time asking for feedback on my query letter. I haven't queried all that many agents, but I haven't had a bite yet, so I thought I would take another look at my letter before I continue. After checking out some of the other posts on this site, I don't know why I've never done th...
by Natasha
October 14th, 2010, 7:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

Okay guys, so here is the deal. I have comments coming in from everywhere about my query (in which i am so grateful for), and with looking at everyone's suggestions --I'm going to try to narrow it all down. See, in the beginning when I wrote my query, everyone pretty much agreed with what was wrong...
by Natasha
October 14th, 2010, 5:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

@casey & @thermo - you both made very good valid points. Thank you for your input. @thermo Yes you're correct - perhaps I should leave the part of her bestfriend finding out, out bc there is a whole part in the story that happens that explains why she still goes to hell even though she's angry. I th...
by Natasha
October 12th, 2010, 6:13 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

If seventeen-year-old Sharlet Gales had known she was dating the son of the devil, she might have reconsidered. PERFECT BEGINNING- COULDNT HAVE GOTTEN BETTER! After being stalked by him for weeks, Sharlet finally meets Kalav Devilson when she threatens to kill him with the tip of her mascara pen HI...
by Natasha
October 12th, 2010, 5:14 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

Awww thank you! Thank you sooo much for all of your help! I really appreciate it. I'll try my best to help you if you post a query.
by Natasha
October 12th, 2010, 4:51 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG Fiction Query (First Time asking for help)
Replies: 14
Views: 2480

Re: MG Fiction Query (First Time asking for help)

Wow. Thank you to all of the people that have posted and helped improve my query letter. I just wanted to update and say that I received a response for the first 30 pages today with your assistance. First time it has ever happened to me and it feels really good, even though I know it is only a baby...
by Natasha
October 12th, 2010, 4:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG Fiction Query (First Time asking for help)
Replies: 14
Views: 2480

Re: MG Fiction Query (First Time asking for help)

First off let me say that the advice that I have received thus far has been extremely helpful. At this point I am embarrassed that I even sent some of my original queries out to agents. I can see why Nathan uses the stick figure banging his head against the desk cartoon, this is frustrating. I have...
by Natasha
October 12th, 2010, 4:27 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

Version 4: I don't know if Sharlet is still coming off passive in this one. I tried to add details on what she goes through to show how strong she is without having to go in long explanations. If seventeen-year-old Sharlet Gales had known she was dating the son of the devil, she might have reconsid...
by Natasha
October 12th, 2010, 12:27 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

Version 3 : After reading Kristin Nelson's blog pitch workshop, it seems that she likes a little bit of story in her queries. So I have taken your advice wilderness, read all of your comments, checked out Kristin's workshop and came up with the following: Seventeen-year-old Sharlet Gales is dating ...
by Natasha
October 11th, 2010, 3:14 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

^^ Thank you so much. I just have one question about the hook. From reading other queries and agent blogs a lot of people keep saying, "introduce the character" or tell us something about the character. Is that too long of an introduction?
by Natasha
October 9th, 2010, 12:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: First Light query. YA Fantasy
Replies: 18
Views: 2793

Re: First Light query {revison 4}. YA Fantasy

I'm not the greatest at this but here goes. My 2cents in the bold. Dear {agent}, If not remembering your past is bad then Ashalei Callister’s life is about to become hell. Confused about flashbacks she’s been getting that seem like memories, but are from another era; where girls wore corsets and lon...
by Natasha
October 9th, 2010, 12:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query
Replies: 18
Views: 2420

Re: AMETHYST - YA Paranormal Romance/Fantasy - Query

^^ Thank you guys so much for your help. I really appreciate you taking time to look at my query. It needed so much help. Update: This wonderful girl named Kimmy, helped me construct a query (that is way better) from looking at a brief-synopsis I wrote up for my book.This is the result of that. What...
by Natasha
October 8th, 2010, 9:15 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY- YA Mystery- Mad as a Hatter
Replies: 30
Views: 4061

Re: QUERY- YA Mystery- Mad as a Hatter

I agree with Priya. I wish I had something to add but gosh you've made such great changes thus far. It's perfect.