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I tried going with a shorter, more storytelling format. Would this be considered a synopsis or a big query? Oye, so confusing! It is a world of Gods and Goddesses, where a mortal Chosen by a deity can join the wicked Destruction or the benevolent Creation. The mortal may or may not be aware of this,...

Thank you so much for your help Quill. Your right, its big information dump overload. Perhaps I'll do one short synopsis and one big one? I'll work on getting this into better shape. Thank you again.

First things first, I know my synopsis is a huge hot mess. I have no idea how to clean it up! Once again I'm on information overload, every website I've researched tells me something different. One website even suggested that I do a four sentence synopsis and call it a day.-lol- If any of you saints...

Dear Mr. Bransford: Something about college student, Eliahna Shay, doesn't quite fit. Like her friends, she's hard working, fun loving, and wouldn't mind dating a nice guy for a change. But when handsome Professor, Aiden Klemenson, singles her out as a potential Chosen of the Gods and a slobbering d...

Thank you android. :) I'll probably fuddle with it a bazillion times before I actually send it out. Now its onto the synopsis-urk. That one scares me the most, which is why I saved it for last. ;)

Thank you for your feedback andriod. I took your advice and played around with the first paragraph, starting with the sentence that you suggested. I also tried to add some info on how big and bad the big bad guys are, hopefully that gave you the info you were looking for. I took out the desire part,...

I took out the Pittsburgh part of the query. I chose Pittsburgh because I live close to it, and can visit it for scenic refrences. Would Washington DC be a better choice? I'm also familiar with that area and can visit it if need be. I also tried to add some of what she is thinking/feeling, and to cl...

Version 3 Dear Agent: CHOSEN BY THE GODS is a completed 90,000 word urban fantasy with romantic elements, in the vein of Laurell K Hamilton and Kim Harrison, set in Pittsburgh. It's not easy growing up as the sheltered daughter of Atheist parents. Especially in a world filled with Gods and magic. C...

Dear Priya, you rock! Thank you for the clear and helpful breakdown. It really has given me a lot to think about in a good way. It's not easy growing up as the dyslexic ARE YOU TRYING TO SAY THAT SHE SEEMS DYSLEXIC TO THE WORLD BUT HER POWERS ARE HIDDEN IN THAT OR SHE IS DYSLEXIC? daughter of Atheis...

Thank you for your very helpful feedback Quill. In this case Gods is capitalized, as they are on equal religious footing with the Christian concept of God. I believe Atheist is also capitalized in this situation, as it would be with calling someone a Protestant, Catholic, or Muslim. I'll research it...

Than you Nettie! Your right, it is sparse. I was trying to follow another guideline that gave me far less than 250 words. And yeah, the tag line is cheese city. Back to the drawing board, thank you for your ideas!

-Version 2 is a few posts down- Dear Ladies and Gents, Thank you SO much in advance for any help you feel inclined to give me. I'm at a total loss with my query. I've researched and googled myself stupid on how to write a query, what makes a good query, what makes a bad one, etc. I've revised and re...