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by agyw
October 1st, 2010, 4:16 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283357

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

title: Sara LeClere, Missing in Action genre: middle grade fiction wc: 250 author: agyw Chapter One Spring 1972 I didn’t REALLY name him. “Scoot, Cussed Cat! If Mimi catches you, she’ll swat you!” I scold Cussy away from the squabble of hens and chicks. He loves to terrorize them. I don’t think he’d...
by agyw
October 1st, 2010, 3:41 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 10/1/10
Replies: 32
Views: 28113

Re: Page Critique Friday 10/1/10

I would read more of this, and the two criticisms I would offer, too much interjection and a difficult comparison to The Lovely Bones, would be noted. I think Dearth of Reason did a wonderful job of bringing the flow and writing to the point. The only reason I interject, I think this could be pushed...