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- April 12th, 2012, 10:38 am
- Forum: Self-Publishing
- Topic: Dark psychological thriller
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1289
- February 13th, 2012, 10:51 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: THE COLOR OF THE SOUL
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2422
Re: Query: THE COLOR OF THE SOUL
I love the first two paragraphs. I agree with the comment on the first sentence. The flow is beautiful. It sets the tone of the story perfectly. Again I must agree about the comments on the last paragraph. It's a little over the top. I know an agent wants the see a self confidence in your letter but...
- February 13th, 2012, 10:30 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: The Following
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1981
Re: Query: The Following
Rewrite. This is actually what I've got as the blur, but it might work as a query. Dear Agent. In search of a story to launch his career, young journalist Tyson Palmer finds one in the ramblings of a homeless man who accuses a self-help organization of setting fires to eliminate those who speak out ...
- February 10th, 2012, 6:34 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: The Following
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1981
Query: The Following
Dear Agent: I am a fictional character, a figment of the author’s imagination. I have gone by many names. In THE FOLLOWING, I play Tyson Palmer; a young journalist, eager to distinguish myself in a family whose name is held in high-esteem among the journalism community. I need a story. My father, a ...
- October 28th, 2011, 11:05 pm
- Forum: Books
- Topic: Finally broke Amazon top 100.
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4515
Finally broke Amazon top 100.
My book IRREFUTABLE finally broke the top 100 on Amazon's best seller list in 3 categories. Closing in on top 100 overall.
Very exciting.
http://www.amazon.com/IRREFUTABLE-ebook/dp/B0052GFSIG
Very exciting.
http://www.amazon.com/IRREFUTABLE-ebook/dp/B0052GFSIG
- September 28th, 2011, 2:29 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First page of THE FOLLOWING (psychological thriller)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3968
Re: First page of THE FOLLOWING (psychological thriller)
Thanks guys, I'll do a little polishing and try again.
Dale
Dale
- September 23rd, 2011, 7:01 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First page of THE FOLLOWING (psychological thriller)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3968
First page of THE FOLLOWING (psychological thriller)
First page of my new novel,The Following. This goes with the query post of the same name.Any input is appreciated. Four minutes seemed like an eternity. Twice as long as it should've taken. He’d allowed for two, maybe two and a half at the most. He had planned meticulously, right down to the second ...
- September 13th, 2011, 4:45 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Following: psychological thriller
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2703
Re: The Following: psychological thriller
Here is my revised query. Thanks for your input. Dear (agent): Tyson Palmer is a risk taker, and as a young journalist who would do anything to break his first big story, he is about to take the biggest risk of his life. When three seemingly unrelated fires within two weeks are ruled to be arson, Ty...
- September 8th, 2011, 6:29 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Following: psychological thriller
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2703
The Following: psychological thriller
This is my second draft query for my new novel, The Following. Please feel free to rip it apart. Dear (agent): In his quest to break a big story, young journalist Tyson Palmer infiltrates a mind controlling cult, but soon falls under their control becoming an unwitting soldier in the army of a chari...
- June 15th, 2011, 1:22 am
- Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
- Topic: Today is Give-away Free Copies of My Ebook day
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4176
Re: Today is Give-away Free Copies of My Ebook day
Very nice cover. Did you design it yourseflf? I like the trailer but there is one issue I can see with it, or can't see. In some places the text is difficult to see against the background. Overall Very Nice.
Here is my trailer and cover.
Here is my trailer and cover.
- June 15th, 2011, 12:57 am
- Forum: Self-Publishing
- Topic: My Self-Publishing Experiment - Initial Results.
- Replies: 66
- Views: 26140
Re: My Self-Publishing Experiment - Initial Results.
My first novel, Irrefutable, has been on Amazon.com as an e-book for about three weeks, since 5/24/2011 So far I have only sold 13 copies and 1 copy on Smashwords. It has received good reviews so far but the visibility is still minimal. Any comments on my cover are welcome. Dale http://www.amazon.co...
- April 18th, 2011, 9:26 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: NOCTURNAL, psychological thriller
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2829
NOCTURNAL, psychological thriller
Hey all, this is the first draft of my query for my new novel NOCTURNAL. (also still in first draft) All comments welcome. Dear (agent name here): When FBI profiler Reardon Meeks goes to Albuquerque to help find a serial killer, clues left at the crime scenes begin not only to reveal a profile of th...
- March 24th, 2011, 11:43 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: IRREFUTABLE
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8280
Re: Query: IRREFUTABLE
Here is my FINAL version of this query. I've cooked it down to the bare essentials. Less is more. Dear (Agent): For Detective Alex Mendez, a routine rape investigation becomes a nightmare when DNA evidence pegs him as the culprit. When a rapist attacks three local women, Alex follows the trail of DN...
- February 15th, 2011, 10:13 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query letter for "Born to Bondage"
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5257
Re: Query letter for "Born to Bondage"
I am by no means an expert, but the opening paragraph is dripping with lack of confidence. I found it a complete turn off. Never point out your weaknesses right off the bat. Never make excuses or say anything negative about your work. (I see you cringing, please don't. I'm told it doesn't read as lo...
- February 11th, 2011, 2:58 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: IRREFUTABLE
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8280
Re: Query: IRREFUTABLE
Let's try again. With every comment, I see ways to improve. Thanks so much. Dear Agent, Celebrated Detective, Alex Mendez has just received his department’s highest honor. But, his world begins to crumble when evidence in a new case leads him down a trail of deception and betrayal, to a dark secret ...