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by trirae
August 9th, 2011, 7:46 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - AnnieWalker, Animal Talker (MG magical realism)
Replies: 5
Views: 1046

Re: Query - AnnieWalker, Animal Talker (MG magical realism)

Very useful comments so far. I appreciate it. Looking forward to hearing what others say.

Just a note, Matt, 47K is typical middle-grade length. Thanks for checking in on that.

Tricia
by trirae
August 9th, 2011, 7:44 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised: QUERY: Moonrise, Epic Fantasy
Replies: 26
Views: 3603

Re: QUERY: Moonrise, Epic Fantasy

Revised Query: Dear [Agent] For generations the Solar and Lunar Dynasties fought for control of the Skyfall Archipelago. When the war ends, the lunar Chandi is sent to watch over her cousin , the new bride of the solar emperor. But the lunar king gives her another task: spy on the solars and find a...
by trirae
August 6th, 2011, 9:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Untitled Contemporary Fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 1178

Re: Query: 'Barbarian' (WT): Contemporary Fiction

In September of 2005, 13-year-old Casey Burbank died of drug overdose in her suburban home. At a party the night before, Izzie’s stepbrother Roan met Casey by chance and the two disappear ED? with a bottle of tequila. Casey was the granddaughter of an ex- Senator and her family are determined to cre...
by trirae
August 6th, 2011, 8:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Alien Academy (YA sci fi) -Revised!
Replies: 6
Views: 1158

Re: Query: Alien Academy (YA sci fi)

When 18-year-old Sam steps off the spaceship at LAX, he’s home for the first time in six years - since the aliens first conscripted him and ninety-nine other children for their training program. Earth air feels as buttery as he remembers it, and Dr. Pepper tastes as great, but Sam and his friends on...
by trirae
August 6th, 2011, 8:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Along The River Styx
Replies: 3
Views: 908

Re: Query: Along The River Styx

Death's dominion is in some serious trouble, and only Delphi, her reaper bodyguard Kameron, and her mortal bestfriend Kaizzie stand in the way of total chaos; and total chaos stands in the way of an attempt at a normal high insert space school social life. I like this sentiment a lot. I think someth...
by trirae
August 6th, 2011, 8:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - AnnieWalker, Animal Talker (MG magical realism)
Replies: 5
Views: 1046

Query - AnnieWalker, Animal Talker (MG magical realism)

Hi all, I could use a little help with the first draft of this query for a 47K MG magical realism novel. I'd appreciate any thoughts you have. It's amazing how someone else's read of a query can change everything. So bring it on! Animals don’t talk. So when they wake twelve-year old Annie in the mi...
by trirae
October 10th, 2010, 10:13 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Agent has full. Should I sent a revised manuscript?
Replies: 4
Views: 1481

Agent has full. Should I sent a revised manuscript?

Greetings, First of all, I apologize if this is a commonly answered question. I've searched all over, but I haven't found a specific answer. Last week, I sent a requested full manuscript to an agent. Something was bothering me about the pacing of the first chapter, and then I realized I unwittingly ...
by trirae
October 8th, 2010, 6:17 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 97578

Re: Rejection Stats

Ah what the heck. I'll play too. Genre: YA/fantasy 10 Queries sent 4 Rejections 1 Requests for full manuscript 0 Requests for partial 0 Personalized rejections 5 Pending Queries I probably made a classic mistake. I sent out five queries initially in the "small batch" theory. Got one request for a fu...
by trirae
October 6th, 2010, 3:05 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG Fiction Query (First Time asking for help)
Replies: 14
Views: 2506

Re: MG Fiction Query (First Time asking for help)

Hi there. I'm not an expert, so I offer ideas just as a reaction. Take or leave. I think you've got a fun story here. Tristan Parker, a seemingly normal eleven year old boy, takes a chance walk into a magic shop and is told that he is part of an ancient magical order of druids. I'm not in love here...
by trirae
October 6th, 2010, 2:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Figment - YA Fantasy- REVISED
Replies: 10
Views: 2039

Re: Query - Figment - YA Fantasy- REVISED AGAIN below

Hi all, I'm attempting another revision. I want to say something about two common questions raised to get an opinion. First, the part where George unexpectedly becomes human. I have intentionally left it out because it's not necessarily all that exciting, but it might take a couple of sentences of d...
by trirae
October 4th, 2010, 12:59 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy
Replies: 3
Views: 1322

Re: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy

You've both been incredibly helpful. I'm going to work on revisions in the next few days, but I wanted to let you know I greatly appreciate the feedback.
by trirae
October 3rd, 2010, 10:10 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy
Replies: 3
Views: 1322

Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy

I am so grateful for the help I've received on the query. I'll admit off the top, I find the synopsis incredibly daunting. Please have at it. GEORGE is AUDREY PARKER’s (17) imaginary friend. He was supposed to leave her to six years ago. ‘The Council,’ his leaders, expect him to return to his world...
by trirae
October 3rd, 2010, 8:53 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction
Replies: 9
Views: 2406

Re: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction

I am no expert, but I think you have a solid start here and an interesting plot. Laura Gallagher tried to be a normal college student. But she cannot fill the chasm left by her coach’s death and her discarded tennis career—not with a poet boyfriend, or straight As, or obsessive running. I like this...
by trirae
October 3rd, 2010, 8:45 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Figment - YA Fantasy- REVISED
Replies: 10
Views: 2039

Re: Query - Figment - YA Fantasy- REVISED

Oh my goodness, I can't tell you how much I appreciate your help so far. I've posted another revision in the OP. If you have a moment to weigh in, I'd be grateful.
by trirae
September 30th, 2010, 11:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Summertime Query
Replies: 28
Views: 3781

Re: Summertime Query

Very new myself. Just jumping in with critiques and ideas. Precocious I think you can do a bit more with this adjective. What makes her precious? ten year-old Summer Thomas is in love with her older sister's best friend. There's just one problem - he's twenty two. I'm guessing this is the set up to...