Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Hi everyone. I'm Tricia, and I've been reading for a while, but I have just started posting. I'm hoping for some feedback as I get ready to begin the query process. Thanks in advance for your time and perspective. Thanks for your reaction. I decided to do an edit last night because you made some poi...

Hi there! I'm also new to this, but thanks for sharing your work. I am not an expert, just reacting base don what I've read. Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Justin Killeen and I am submitting my project “Children of the Lost” to your agency as it has experience in the genres and types of fiction that in...

Hi there, I am very new, so please take my thoughts with a grain of salt. I think the concept and the conflict are very interesting. The revision is much clearer than the original. I would still like a big more of a hook on the first line. For some reason it's tripping me up rather than inviting me ...

Hi there,

I'm completely new too. I would suggest from my initial reads of the two versions that the second one is off to a better start. It gets into the characters rather than the history. Both are important, but I think it brings out the action faster.