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- October 25th, 2010, 3:45 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: When the Sun rises- Adult fiction
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1731
Re: When the Sun rises- Adult fiction
Hi Priya, I'm going to go with fishfood on this one. The conflict has been set up - perfect life vs. what else is there - so now what? Unless high school is where the seed of her conflict is planted, i'm not sure you need it. She's got everything, why do we like her/ and what is she going to fight f...
- October 17th, 2010, 11:23 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query
- Replies: 28
- Views: 9792
Re: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query
I think you should stick with your instincts. Your voice is key.
Polly.
Polly.
- October 16th, 2010, 7:56 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query
- Replies: 28
- Views: 9792
Re: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query
Hi Priya, I've looked at this query several times and I'm not sure what to say. I think it's evident you've been working very hard and that this story is very important to you and deeply felt. This query seems unfocused and it's very hard to keep track of what is going on. I guess i'd start with the...
- October 12th, 2010, 11:35 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Silent No More
- Replies: 22
- Views: 8056
Re: Query: Silent No More
Candy,
you can do it. I think it's like a puzzle - keep trying different pieces. You also might try looking at the "Query Shark" site - she might choose your query to critique, and you never know. Also, submit it here for Nathan's query crtitique fridays.
Polly
you can do it. I think it's like a puzzle - keep trying different pieces. You also might try looking at the "Query Shark" site - she might choose your query to critique, and you never know. Also, submit it here for Nathan's query crtitique fridays.
Polly
- October 11th, 2010, 8:11 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Silent No More
- Replies: 22
- Views: 8056
Re: Query: Silent No More
Dear Agent; One in three women in the Armed Forces is sexually assaulted or raped by her comrade in arms. Since 2005 CNN, ABC, NBC, FOX, and CBS have reported on rape in the military. The Pentagon investigates, unit commanders try to find a way to stop it but more and more victims still come forward...
- October 10th, 2010, 8:31 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7289
Re: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Hey Severus ( I can't believe I just typed that.)
Thank you for your comments. What is it about the last para. that irks you? Does it pull you out of what's been set up, or do you think it doesn't set up the rest of the book?
Thanks.
Polly
Thank you for your comments. What is it about the last para. that irks you? Does it pull you out of what's been set up, or do you think it doesn't set up the rest of the book?
Thanks.
Polly
- October 10th, 2010, 5:35 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4633
Re: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction
Laura Gallagher tried to be a normal college student. What is a normal college student? this is pretty general . But she cannot fill the chasm left by her coach’s death and her discarded tennis career—not with a poet boyfriend, or straight As, or obsessive running. She flees to Mexico for her junior...
- October 10th, 2010, 5:24 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: AMÉRICA! - Query - Historical Fiction
- Replies: 21
- Views: 6423
Re: AMÉRICA! - Query - Historical Fiction
All of the available research is very partisan. Argentine historians contend that Bolivar was a vainglorious bully, willing to threaten the entire independence movement, unless he San Martin was removed from the picture, and he could be top dog. Venezuelan historians argue that San Martin was a pap...
- October 10th, 2010, 5:07 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7289
Re: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Thanks to everyone for their help. I've been really thinking "what is this book about?" and think I've come up with the answer. Dear Agent: Will is trapped. He’s the youngest of the McAndrew brothers, three men who exist mainly for sex, drinking and trouble. They’ve also been living under...
- October 4th, 2010, 12:19 am
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: Which NFL team do you cheer for?
- Replies: 14
- Views: 5121
Re: Which NFL team do you cheer for?
Nathan, I'm sorry, but no.
Packers. Packers. Packers.
I love Favre, but he needs to take his hillbilly ass home.
Packers. Packers. Packers.
I love Favre, but he needs to take his hillbilly ass home.
- October 4th, 2010, 12:14 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Summertime Query
- Replies: 28
- Views: 8263
Re: Summertime Query
I think it's also OK to refer to her "gifted" status - the interesting thing is that many young people are extremely gifted academically but not caught up in their emotional development. Which would seem part of why she sees herself with Zach - boys her age are way to immature. And yes, th...
- October 2nd, 2010, 8:56 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query 'Kat's Tale'
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2788
Re: Query 'Kat's Tale'
Hi,
Is this a rewrite of Blood of Ihdun or a new book?
Polly
Is this a rewrite of Blood of Ihdun or a new book?
Polly
- October 2nd, 2010, 2:26 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Swayed
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2638
Re: Query: Swayed
A secret society wants seventeen-year-old Caleb Dunnelly dead. Here he’s been minding his own business for all his life, when a brotherhood called Libra decides to destroy a nightclub with him inside. Burn it to the ground with blood runes and black fire. Dozens die, but he manages to escape. Then s...
- October 1st, 2010, 5:18 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7289
Re: THE REMEDY -2nd try at page bottom- Women's upmarket fiction
Thanks glj.
Specificity, right? It's a big story and I feel like I'm fighting to describe it in this catchy way, when really, it's not pink covered chick lit. It's more like Alice Hoffman's stuff, just less depressing.
Thank you and I'm not giving up.
Polly
Specificity, right? It's a big story and I feel like I'm fighting to describe it in this catchy way, when really, it's not pink covered chick lit. It's more like Alice Hoffman's stuff, just less depressing.
Thank you and I'm not giving up.
Polly
- October 1st, 2010, 1:56 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7289
Re: THE REMEDY -2nd try at page bottom- Women's upmarket fiction
AGENTS WEIGH IN: From Kristin Nelson's Pub Rants blog: "In terms of upmarket commercial women’s fiction, it’s all about the writing. Really, editors are looking for literary writers who can tackle the more commercial themes in a way that’s fresh and well constructed." From the Folio Lit We...