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by pollymilton
October 25th, 2010, 3:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: When the Sun rises- Adult fiction
Replies: 3
Views: 763

Re: When the Sun rises- Adult fiction

Hi Priya, I'm going to go with fishfood on this one. The conflict has been set up - perfect life vs. what else is there - so now what? Unless high school is where the seed of her conflict is planted, i'm not sure you need it. She's got everything, why do we like her/ and what is she going to fight f...
by pollymilton
October 17th, 2010, 11:23 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query
Replies: 28
Views: 4457

Re: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query

I think you should stick with your instincts. Your voice is key.
Polly.
by pollymilton
October 16th, 2010, 7:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query
Replies: 28
Views: 4457

Re: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query

Hi Priya, I've looked at this query several times and I'm not sure what to say. I think it's evident you've been working very hard and that this story is very important to you and deeply felt. This query seems unfocused and it's very hard to keep track of what is going on. I guess i'd start with the...
by pollymilton
October 12th, 2010, 11:35 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Silent No More
Replies: 22
Views: 3714

Re: Query: Silent No More

Candy,
you can do it. I think it's like a puzzle - keep trying different pieces. You also might try looking at the "Query Shark" site - she might choose your query to critique, and you never know. Also, submit it here for Nathan's query crtitique fridays.
Polly
by pollymilton
October 11th, 2010, 8:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Silent No More
Replies: 22
Views: 3714

Re: Query: Silent No More

Dear Agent; One in three women in the Armed Forces is sexually assaulted or raped by her comrade in arms. Since 2005 CNN, ABC, NBC, FOX, and CBS have reported on rape in the military. The Pentagon investigates, unit commanders try to find a way to stop it but more and more victims still come forward...
by pollymilton
October 10th, 2010, 8:31 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3538

Re: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction

Hey Severus ( I can't believe I just typed that.)
Thank you for your comments. What is it about the last para. that irks you? Does it pull you out of what's been set up, or do you think it doesn't set up the rest of the book?
Thanks.
Polly
by pollymilton
October 10th, 2010, 5:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction
Replies: 9
Views: 2406

Re: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction

Laura Gallagher tried to be a normal college student. What is a normal college student? this is pretty general . But she cannot fill the chasm left by her coach’s death and her discarded tennis career—not with a poet boyfriend, or straight As, or obsessive running. She flees to Mexico for her junior...
by pollymilton
October 10th, 2010, 5:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: AMÉRICA! - Query - Historical Fiction
Replies: 21
Views: 2794

Re: AMÉRICA! - Query - Historical Fiction

All of the available research is very partisan. Argentine historians contend that Bolivar was a vainglorious bully, willing to threaten the entire independence movement, unless he San Martin was removed from the picture, and he could be top dog. Venezuelan historians argue that San Martin was a pap...
by pollymilton
October 10th, 2010, 5:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3538

Re: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction

Thanks to everyone for their help. I've been really thinking "what is this book about?" and think I've come up with the answer. Dear Agent: Will is trapped. He’s the youngest of the McAndrew brothers, three men who exist mainly for sex, drinking and trouble. They’ve also been living under a spell. ...
by pollymilton
October 4th, 2010, 12:19 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Which NFL team do you cheer for?
Replies: 14
Views: 2345

Re: Which NFL team do you cheer for?

Nathan, I'm sorry, but no.

Packers. Packers. Packers.

I love Favre, but he needs to take his hillbilly ass home.
by pollymilton
October 4th, 2010, 12:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Summertime Query
Replies: 28
Views: 3782

Re: Summertime Query

I think it's also OK to refer to her "gifted" status - the interesting thing is that many young people are extremely gifted academically but not caught up in their emotional development. Which would seem part of why she sees herself with Zach - boys her age are way to immature. And yes, they want to...
by pollymilton
October 2nd, 2010, 8:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query 'Kat's Tale'
Replies: 7
Views: 1151

Re: Query 'Kat's Tale'

Hi,
Is this a rewrite of Blood of Ihdun or a new book?
Polly
by pollymilton
October 2nd, 2010, 2:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Swayed
Replies: 6
Views: 1245

Re: Query: Swayed

A secret society wants seventeen-year-old Caleb Dunnelly dead. Here he’s been minding his own business for all his life, when a brotherhood called Libra decides to destroy a nightclub with him inside. Burn it to the ground with blood runes and black fire. Dozens die, but he manages to escape. Then s...
by pollymilton
October 1st, 2010, 5:18 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3538

Re: THE REMEDY -2nd try at page bottom- Women's upmarket fiction

Thanks glj.
Specificity, right? It's a big story and I feel like I'm fighting to describe it in this catchy way, when really, it's not pink covered chick lit. It's more like Alice Hoffman's stuff, just less depressing.
Thank you and I'm not giving up.
Polly
by pollymilton
October 1st, 2010, 1:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3538

Re: THE REMEDY -2nd try at page bottom- Women's upmarket fiction

AGENTS WEIGH IN: From Kristin Nelson's Pub Rants blog: "In terms of upmarket commercial women’s fiction, it’s all about the writing. Really, editors are looking for literary writers who can tackle the more commercial themes in a way that’s fresh and well constructed." From the Folio Lit Web site: "W...