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by geistwrite
January 1st, 2012, 3:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: IN MY BLOOD - Paranormal YA
Replies: 4
Views: 1046

Re: IN MY BLOOD - Paranormal YA

Thanks for the feedback! It's helpful to see it from fresh eyes and know the strength/weakness.
Appreciate the response.
by geistwrite
December 22nd, 2011, 2:36 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: IN MY BLOOD - Paranormal YA
Replies: 4
Views: 1046

IN MY BLOOD - Paranormal YA

Hello All - - I've been trying out a few things on this query and could really use your feedback. It's a big 'ol honkin' book, so I have to grab 'em and certainly can't sum up the whole story in one little letter. So, does this grab you? Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! .... In Rhianna’s b...
by geistwrite
September 28th, 2010, 3:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query
Replies: 11
Views: 1843

Re: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query

Your comments are all helpful and I thank you very much for the time you have put in to reading my query. I think perhaps I am getting closer to conveying what I want to say here. Hopefully it is coming together for those reviewing it too. Dear M. Agent Name, Anna’s vampire mother and werewolf fath...
by geistwrite
September 28th, 2010, 2:20 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: We Are Chosen
Replies: 14
Views: 1688

Re: Query: We Are Chosen

Markyi Lharnid lives in an America fifty years into the future where not being Christian is punishable by death and being raped is considered adulterous. P.S. My point of just saying "Christian" is that in my book that's what they call themselves. In America, there's nothing more specific than that...
by geistwrite
September 27th, 2010, 11:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query
Replies: 11
Views: 1843

Re: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query

Ok, I have been trying to do more of a summary than anything else and have been getting lots of questions in the process that people seem to want answered. I went for a new approach with this one. It is different from anything I have tried yet, and tries to specifically answer questions that the ot...
by geistwrite
September 26th, 2010, 11:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query
Replies: 11
Views: 1843

Re: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query

I am an unpublished writer seeking a literary agent. FADING GREY is a 90,000 word paranormal romance. Anna, half wolf and half vampire, is caught between two worlds that war to own her or kill her. As a child abandoned by her loving parents in a small Idaho town, she tries to find her way in-between...
by geistwrite
September 26th, 2010, 7:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: We Are Chosen
Replies: 14
Views: 1688

Re: Query: We Are Chosen

Markyi Lharnid lives in a world where not being Christian is punishable by death and being raped is considered adulterous. I think this is a strong first statement. If you are dealing with the right agent a statement like this might appeal, but to others it might be a turn off. Maybe consider lettin...
by geistwrite
September 25th, 2010, 12:16 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: I'm A Nobody, newest on page four
Replies: 34
Views: 5654

Re: I'm A Nobody, Revised shorter version after rejections

Wow, I really like this! It seems very original and like it would be a fun read. I have very few comments, but I would say that off the bat I would like to know what the acronym HEROS stands for, and maybe what happens to the classmate he follows (is that the only purpose she served? or, boy and gir...
by geistwrite
September 24th, 2010, 11:15 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 120181

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Mr. Bransford, Anna’s vampire mother and werewolf father abandoned her as a young child in an effort to protect her from their feuding races. Her existence has been disputed for the last fourteen years since her parents’ brutal murders, as both sides have attempted to locate her. 18 year old An...
by geistwrite
September 24th, 2010, 10:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query
Replies: 11
Views: 1843

FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query

Dear Mr. Bransford, I am an unpublished writer seeking a literary agent. FADING GREY is a work of fiction in the paranormal romance genre and is about 90,000 words. Anna’s world is a unique mix of myths and legends come to life. FADING GREY is the story of Anna, half wolf, half vampire, as she tries...
by geistwrite
September 24th, 2010, 9:54 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 282985

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

FADING GREY Paranormal Romance (90k) The fever began to take me over. The burning started in my heart, as if my chest itself was fully engulfed in flames. I looked down, eyes dazed, expecting to see the flames leaping out of my pink sundress. But, there were no flames, just this unquenchable, undeni...