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- November 9th, 2010, 3:56 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 183882
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Mr. Bransford, If Richard slips up and reveals his telepathic abilities, the inevitable witch-hunt for his kind could tear society apart. The trouble is that Richard doesn't know he's a telepath. He's just an eleven year-old orphan who hears whispers. That couldn't be telepathy, could it? Howev...
- October 1st, 2010, 10:10 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Grammar, Language, and Communication: Ask & Answer
- Replies: 30
- Views: 9040
Re: Grammar, Language, and Communication: Ask & Answer
When the dog barks,
When the bee stings,
When I feel less literate than some,
I go to Craigslist dot org and look at some posts,
And then I don't feel...
So dumb
(for those who have watched The Sound of Music...)
When the bee stings,
When I feel less literate than some,
I go to Craigslist dot org and look at some posts,
And then I don't feel...
So dumb
(for those who have watched The Sound of Music...)
- October 1st, 2010, 1:38 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Passive Voice Debate
- Replies: 40
- Views: 18605
Re: Passive Voice Debate
J. T., here it is, enjoy! Reflexes and training took over. Fugalburt tossed the remains of his dinner Shrimp Scampi dinner on the beast's head. Maybe the pungency of the garlic would distract the thing. It worked. The beast began waving its head back and forth as if to rid itself of the smell. Fugal...
- September 29th, 2010, 11:06 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Passive Voice Debate
- Replies: 40
- Views: 18605
Re: Passive Voice Debate
I'd like to thank everyone for their input for this discussion. It has been very helpful.
- September 27th, 2010, 11:12 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Things I wish I'd been told when I started
- Replies: 27
- Views: 10095
Re: Things I wish I'd been told when I started
Sorry that this is off-subject but I really feel the need to compliment Polymath on the bowl. It is beautiful and must have been a geometric nightmare to block out. But with the name of Polymath, maybe not. ;)
- September 27th, 2010, 10:53 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Passive Voice Debate
- Replies: 40
- Views: 18605
Re: Passive Voice Debate
Thank you all for your input. It has been very informative. Now I'd like to present the sad but humorous end of Fugalburt for our dissection. ..... Navels fascinated Fugalburt. He often explored his own, wondering what truths, or riches awaited discovery. Although, thus far he'd only found a porridg...
- September 27th, 2010, 4:51 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Passive Voice Debate
- Replies: 40
- Views: 18605
Passive Voice Debate
I propose a discussion about passive voice; definition, pros and cons, etc. I have only ever heard the 'weak impact' criticism and am interested in other viewpoints. I did notice that Nathan attached the word 'extended' to passive voice in the blog where he denigrated it, which makes me wonder where...
- September 27th, 2010, 4:39 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Conundrum
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3749
Re: Query Conundrum
I thank all of you for your thoughtful and encouraging replies. Based on your responses, I'm leaning toward connecting everyone to the boy, even though he is eleven and the novel is not YA. My thinking is that, no matter what age a reader has reached, and no matter how much personal power a reader h...
- September 26th, 2010, 3:23 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Conundrum
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3749
Query Conundrum
The subject of Hearing Voices is telepathy. The plot is woven, William Gibson style, from multiple story lines, and told from the perspectives of the 'luckless pedestrian' characters (to borrow a phrase from Steely Dan). My problem is that a one-page query (which I don't want to exceed) does not all...