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by GerriB
September 17th, 2010, 6:52 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Your favorite first book
Replies: 12
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Re: Your favorite first book

Legend by David Gemmell. One of the best first novels I've ever read. It didn't read like a first novel. Imagine my disappointment when I went to look for more of his books and there weren't any! Aargh! But eventually, there were. I was quite sad when I heard he died. :(
by GerriB
September 11th, 2010, 6:20 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
Replies: 33
Views: 29228

Re: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10

Three things jumped out at me about this clip, and they're all intertwined. The voice of this piece is too distant, due in a large part to the abuse of the past progressive. There's no reason to have the progressive tense, esp. at the opening of the book. As readers, we assume that yes, things have ...