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by CMO
September 10th, 2010, 8:20 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Young Adult paranormal romance
Replies: 11
Views: 1844

Re: Young Adult paranormal romance

Wallflower I do thank you for your critique. My book is actually about aliens living secretly amongst us for the last 300 yrs so your alien thing about laughter of humans really doesn't apply. My characters are trying to live on earth without anyone knowing. Thanks for the cliche stuff that was great.
by CMO
September 10th, 2010, 4:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Forever Young: The Rebirth- final version?
Replies: 25
Views: 3340

Re: Query- Forever Young: The Rebirth- newest version

I can see the similarity to Harry Potter. Not sure how to change it. Maybe it was a good idea not to put that in the Query. Could you say something about seeing how real parents treat their children and questioning why he is treated brings him to wonder and then find out he is adopted. If not go bac...
by CMO
September 10th, 2010, 4:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Young Adult paranormal romance
Replies: 11
Views: 1844

Re: Young Adult paranormal romance

Thanks Whip Slip, Jade, and Write 2 Me. I wrote my Query on the first few pages of my book but I think I am going to switch some stuff around anyways and start the book with an action scene. I will write my Query after I tweak the book a little. Thanks for the encouragement my favorite books are whe...
by CMO
September 10th, 2010, 2:41 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Forever Young: The Rebirth- final version?
Replies: 25
Views: 3340

Re: Query- Forever Young: The Rebirth- newest version

Aaren Danielson is a mentally unstable thirteen-year-old, facing the ominous choice of sacrificing his life for a world he struggles to care about, or watching it burn to the ground. Aaren’s life begins to unravel after he makes a curious discovery while researching for a family tree project, and af...
by CMO
September 8th, 2010, 9:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Young Adult paranormal romance
Replies: 11
Views: 1844

Re: Young Adult paranormal romance

I can really get where you all get the Twilight knockoff from. Kristen Nelson said to write a query from the first 30 pages of your book. Mine has similarities to Twilight. I think i am going to have to rework the entire thing. Thank you all so much for your honest critiques. This is exactly what I ...
by CMO
September 8th, 2010, 10:01 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Young Adult paranormal romance
Replies: 11
Views: 1844

Young Adult paranormal romance

I sent a query out recently and got rejections only. I then revised it but am still unsure so I would absolutely love some feedback. Thanks so much. Invasion of the Heart is the title and it is 70,000 complete. All Catriona O’neil wants is to fit in, but she lives the life of a nomad. By the time Ca...