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- January 22nd, 2011, 2:41 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: CLASS (Literary fiction, maybe?)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3260
Re: Query: CLASS (Literary fiction, maybe?)
This is Garcia: if he dropped a pizza on the floor, and the piece that landed closest to him also landed cheese side down, Garcia would eat that slice. First. I don't object to this line, but be aware that it reads: 'Garcia is lazy'. Which means I assume this to be the trait that motivates him - and...
- January 22nd, 2011, 1:55 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
- Replies: 20
- Views: 8552
Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 1
REVISION # 2 Here's my third and final version. I'm not sure if I'm improving it, or just going round in circles! I've copied the first and second attempts below for comparison. Third attempt Fifty years ago, Ángel Valdés led the revolution that freed his Caribbean country from tyranny with his comr...
- December 14th, 2010, 6:35 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
- Replies: 20
- Views: 8552
Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query
REVISION 1 Thanks again, everyone, for your fantastic advice. I've tried to take everything you've said into account without losing the tone or bloating the query. Is this an improvement? ----- "People's memories are short. And life is so damn long." Fifty years ago Ángel Valdés co-led the...
- November 28th, 2010, 3:52 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
- Replies: 20
- Views: 8552
Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query
Interesting. Thanks. I'll seek them out. Where were you looking?
- November 28th, 2010, 3:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
- Replies: 20
- Views: 8552
Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query
I thought so! But I posted it in another forum and they thought definitely not (and also that I'd have more chance of selling it as something else). Thanks for your vote though. Maybe something like: 'literary fiction with elements of suspense'...
- November 28th, 2010, 2:49 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
- Replies: 20
- Views: 8552
Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query
Thanks, all, for your insightful critiques. I'm going to mull it over a bit before revising. Meanwhile, does anyone have any thoughts on the genre? I really struggle here. I wrote it as a kind of modern Shakespearean tragedy (storywise), with the hero a cross between Macbeth and Fidel Castro. Some p...
- November 27th, 2010, 11:50 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY -- THE FERRYMAN -- Revision No. 1
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5402
Re: QUERY -- THE FERRYMAN -- Revision No. 1
Charlie wants what any man wants: love, adventure and the coins of recently deceased souls. The writing is witty and tight, but I'm not sure what these coins are. He thought an afterlife as a ferryman was a lucky break. Ah, so he's a dead pickpocket! Intriguing, but what does the next line mean? Tha...
- November 27th, 2010, 9:14 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3385
Re: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN
Hi Ermo, I was really confused by the first paragraph, and am still not entirely sure I understand the plot, so I'm going to summarise the story as I understand it: Tim Mann, a successful funeral director, has been told by a computer program that he has no soul [how? and why would he believe it? Als...
- November 27th, 2010, 7:51 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
- Replies: 20
- Views: 8552
THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
* THIS IS MY ORIGINAL QUERY. THE LATEST REVISION IS ON PAGE 2, ALONG WITH THE FIRST TWO ATTEMPTS * Dear all, I've written this query so many times, I've totally lost perspective. This is the latest version. I wrote it as literary fiction, but some people in my writing group described it as a thrill...
- September 5th, 2010, 6:18 am
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: UK versus US Queries
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1855
UK versus US Queries
I'm stumped. Most of the good info regarding killer query letters comes from US agent blogs like this one, which recommend you go straight into selling your story. So for weeks I've been honing my query to make it as punchy and seductive as possible. But I'm now submitting to UK agents, and have rea...