Search found 10 matches

by Inglory
January 22nd, 2011, 2:41 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: CLASS (Literary fiction, maybe?)
Replies: 8
Views: 1062

Re: Query: CLASS (Literary fiction, maybe?)

This is Garcia: if he dropped a pizza on the floor, and the piece that landed closest to him also landed cheese side down, Garcia would eat that slice. First. I don't object to this line, but be aware that it reads: 'Garcia is lazy'. Which means I assume this to be the trait that motivates him - and...
by Inglory
January 22nd, 2011, 1:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
Replies: 20
Views: 2683

Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 1

REVISION # 2 Here's my third and final version. I'm not sure if I'm improving it, or just going round in circles! I've copied the first and second attempts below for comparison. Third attempt Fifty years ago, Ángel Valdés led the revolution that freed his Caribbean country from tyranny with his comr...
by Inglory
December 14th, 2010, 6:35 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
Replies: 20
Views: 2683

Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query

REVISION 1 Thanks again, everyone, for your fantastic advice. I've tried to take everything you've said into account without losing the tone or bloating the query. Is this an improvement? ----- "People's memories are short. And life is so damn long." Fifty years ago Ángel Valdés co-led the revolutio...
by Inglory
November 28th, 2010, 3:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
Replies: 20
Views: 2683

Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query

Interesting. Thanks. I'll seek them out. Where were you looking?
by Inglory
November 28th, 2010, 3:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
Replies: 20
Views: 2683

Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query

I thought so! But I posted it in another forum and they thought definitely not (and also that I'd have more chance of selling it as something else). Thanks for your vote though. Maybe something like: 'literary fiction with elements of suspense'...
by Inglory
November 28th, 2010, 2:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
Replies: 20
Views: 2683

Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query

Thanks, all, for your insightful critiques. I'm going to mull it over a bit before revising. Meanwhile, does anyone have any thoughts on the genre? I really struggle here. I wrote it as a kind of modern Shakespearean tragedy (storywise), with the hero a cross between Macbeth and Fidel Castro. Some p...
by Inglory
November 27th, 2010, 11:50 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY -- THE FERRYMAN -- Revision No. 1
Replies: 12
Views: 1903

Re: QUERY -- THE FERRYMAN -- Revision No. 1

Charlie wants what any man wants: love, adventure and the coins of recently deceased souls. The writing is witty and tight, but I'm not sure what these coins are. He thought an afterlife as a ferryman was a lucky break. Ah, so he's a dead pickpocket! Intriguing, but what does the next line mean? Tha...
by Inglory
November 27th, 2010, 9:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN
Replies: 8
Views: 1106

Re: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN

Hi Ermo, I was really confused by the first paragraph, and am still not entirely sure I understand the plot, so I'm going to summarise the story as I understand it: Tim Mann, a successful funeral director, has been told by a computer program that he has no soul [how? and why would he believe it? Als...
by Inglory
November 27th, 2010, 7:51 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
Replies: 20
Views: 2683

THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2

* THIS IS MY ORIGINAL QUERY. THE LATEST REVISION IS ON PAGE 2, ALONG WITH THE FIRST TWO ATTEMPTS * Dear all, I've written this query so many times, I've totally lost perspective. This is the latest version. I wrote it as literary fiction, but some people in my writing group described it as a thrill...
by Inglory
September 5th, 2010, 6:18 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: UK versus US Queries
Replies: 2
Views: 775

UK versus US Queries

I'm stumped. Most of the good info regarding killer query letters comes from US agent blogs like this one, which recommend you go straight into selling your story. So for weeks I've been honing my query to make it as punchy and seductive as possible. But I'm now submitting to UK agents, and have rea...