Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Final version. This'll be sent out around the end of April, when everything's polished as it can be. Thanks a ton to all who contributed. I have to say, I'm optimistic... Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exile from Eden. The earth has been cursed, hu...

Dang it, littlebird. You might be right. Revised last paragraph.

ANTEDILUVIAN is a historical fantasy novel that breathes new life into Biblical descriptions of an ancient world. Complete at 100,000 words, it has been written with multivolume potential in mind.

Thoughts?

More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exile from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil, and legendary beasts roam the wilderness. The Grigori, angels charged with watching over mankind, have abandoned their appointed angelic statio...

misstante - thanks for the suggestions and encouraging comments

glj - good suggestions, thanks

Final query, the result of very many good critiques and suggestions. Big question (and obviously impossible to truly answer until I send it off, but your opinions appreciated nonetheless): is it good enough to get an agent to look at the MS? Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since...

Guardian - thanks for the comments and suggestions. This is indeed the first book of a proposed trilogy. GaoYuQing - that's a good idea ("historical fantasy" might be what I end up querying under). I'm indeed sticking close to the Bible - the story will maintain complete fidelity to the Bi...

Resurrected. Any comments and critiques from fresh eyes? Also, how does this change to the last sentence sound: "Meanwhile, his Nephilim comrades must decide, once and for all, whether they will fight on the side of the humans or the angels, and their choice may very mean the difference between...

fishfood - I might just trust the reader to correctly make that same connection you did. elfspirit - thanks for the encouragement! Seems like there have been a few Nephilim/fallen angel books put out lately, mostly YA and all modern. I began this before any of them came out, but I do think it may im...

fishfood - thanks a ton for earlier critique - did I cover enough detail on the betrayal? priya g - thanks for the encouragement - you've helped a lot. wilderness - I think you were right about the level of specificity. I may have been treating it as more of a back-of-the-book teaser blurb than I sh...

Nathan, Hey! I'm working on a MS based on Genesis 1-9. I posted in the query forums, and we had a discussion on the appropriate genre for the story. Long story short, whether one would consider this historical fiction or fantasy depends entirely on one's view of Genesis. According to a series of Gal...

Query version #4. Tried to walk that line between specificity and synopsis. Lots of suggestions incorporated - hope you see yours! Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exit from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil,...

My cup runneth over with excellent critiques! Thank you all a ton. Working on query revision now - will try to address a few of the specific comments when I post it. Thanks again, all. I feel like I'm miles ahead of where I started.

Query revision. Hope I solved some problems without creating new ones. Have at it. Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exit from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil, and legendary beasts roam the wilderness. The G...

Hey! I like the story, I think your query was good and has gotten better, and I'm just here to pick nits. Two things jumped out at me Unfortunately, their guardian comes in the form of a moody and unwilling--albeit unnervingly attractive--warrior named Logan. Because you're using a plurality as the ...

Query, updated. All critiques and comments much appreciated. Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exit from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil, and legendary beasts roam the wilderness. Angels have abandoned their...