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by Auralius
March 25th, 2011, 5:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Final version. This'll be sent out around the end of April, when everything's polished as it can be. Thanks a ton to all who contributed. I have to say, I'm optimistic... Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exile from Eden. The earth has been cursed, hu...
by Auralius
March 11th, 2011, 11:08 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Dang it, littlebird. You might be right. Revised last paragraph.

ANTEDILUVIAN is a historical fantasy novel that breathes new life into Biblical descriptions of an ancient world. Complete at 100,000 words, it has been written with multivolume potential in mind.

Thoughts?
by Auralius
March 11th, 2011, 11:46 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exile from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil, and legendary beasts roam the wilderness. The Grigori, angels charged with watching over mankind, have abandoned their appointed angelic statio...
by Auralius
March 1st, 2011, 1:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

misstante - thanks for the suggestions and encouraging comments

glj - good suggestions, thanks
by Auralius
February 27th, 2011, 8:19 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Final query, the result of very many good critiques and suggestions. Big question (and obviously impossible to truly answer until I send it off, but your opinions appreciated nonetheless): is it good enough to get an agent to look at the MS? Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since...
by Auralius
February 26th, 2011, 8:22 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Guardian - thanks for the comments and suggestions. This is indeed the first book of a proposed trilogy. GaoYuQing - that's a good idea ("historical fantasy" might be what I end up querying under). I'm indeed sticking close to the Bible - the story will maintain complete fidelity to the Biblical tex...
by Auralius
February 23rd, 2011, 7:59 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Resurrected. Any comments and critiques from fresh eyes? Also, how does this change to the last sentence sound: "Meanwhile, his Nephilim comrades must decide, once and for all, whether they will fight on the side of the humans or the angels, and their choice may very mean the difference between the ...
by Auralius
November 6th, 2010, 7:49 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

fishfood - I might just trust the reader to correctly make that same connection you did. elfspirit - thanks for the encouragement! Seems like there have been a few Nephilim/fallen angel books put out lately, mostly YA and all modern. I began this before any of them came out, but I do think it may im...
by Auralius
October 24th, 2010, 5:05 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

fishfood - thanks a ton for earlier critique - did I cover enough detail on the betrayal? priya g - thanks for the encouragement - you've helped a lot. wilderness - I think you were right about the level of specificity. I may have been treating it as more of a back-of-the-book teaser blurb than I sh...
by Auralius
October 23rd, 2010, 7:30 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Genre question - historical fiction/fantasy
Replies: 1
Views: 576

Genre question - historical fiction/fantasy

Nathan, Hey! I'm working on a MS based on Genesis 1-9. I posted in the query forums, and we had a discussion on the appropriate genre for the story. Long story short, whether one would consider this historical fiction or fantasy depends entirely on one's view of Genesis. According to a series of Gal...
by Auralius
October 22nd, 2010, 7:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Query version #4. Tried to walk that line between specificity and synopsis. Lots of suggestions incorporated - hope you see yours! Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exit from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil,...
by Auralius
October 22nd, 2010, 2:04 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

My cup runneth over with excellent critiques! Thank you all a ton. Working on query revision now - will try to address a few of the specific comments when I post it. Thanks again, all. I feel like I'm miles ahead of where I started.
by Auralius
October 20th, 2010, 5:27 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Query revision. Hope I solved some problems without creating new ones. Have at it. Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exit from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil, and legendary beasts roam the wilderness. The G...
by Auralius
October 20th, 2010, 2:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Young Adult Fantasy Query
Replies: 22
Views: 2963

Re: Young Adult Fantasy Query

Hey! I like the story, I think your query was good and has gotten better, and I'm just here to pick nits. Two things jumped out at me Unfortunately, their guardian comes in the form of a moody and unwilling--albeit unnervingly attractive--warrior named Logan. Because you're using a plurality as the ...
by Auralius
October 17th, 2010, 2:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
Replies: 41
Views: 6317

Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query

Query, updated. All critiques and comments much appreciated. Dear [agent], More than a thousand years have passed since the fall of man and the exit from Eden. The earth has been cursed, humans scrape meager livings from the soil, and legendary beasts roam the wilderness. Angels have abandoned their...