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by TessB
September 14th, 2010, 10:10 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 284625

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title - Timesurfers
Genre - YA Urban Fantasy
by TessB
August 29th, 2010, 9:40 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Timesurfers Take two posted 30 Aug
Replies: 7
Views: 1110

Re: Query Timesurfers

TAKE TWO

Thanks to the very generous people who provided feedback . Here is a second draft of this query. I am still worried about Cate's love interest being tacked on and that I maybe rambling. - Any and all comments will be very much appreciated. Tess

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by TessB
August 29th, 2010, 7:28 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: REVISION 7 – Cameron Kincaid and The Perfect Treasure –
Replies: 23
Views: 3223

Re: Query Critique – Cameron Kincaid and The Perfect Treasure –

Hey - you certainly have the knack for condensing information and creating a punchy query. I've put some comments etc below - all just IMO- you know your story and characters best. Good luck with it.
by TessB
August 29th, 2010, 5:16 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: The Enemy Within - Final Take, Page 3
Replies: 25
Views: 3554

Re: Query: The Enemy Within (Take 2 or maybe 3)

HI I've added a few edits ( am new to the system) The story sound great - I'm not too sure about the horse fram dream getting two mentions. If it is that important maybe tell us why? - Just a thought. The last sentence is stellar - I would keep that for sure. It looks like you're whipping this into ...
by TessB
August 28th, 2010, 11:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Timesurfers Take two posted 30 Aug
Replies: 7
Views: 1110

Re: Query Timesurfers

Wow! A big high five to everyone who has taken the time to comment and dissect my lame query. Fresh insight is invaluable. I will digest everyone's comments and take another shot. Again - Thanks - Really appreciated. Tessxx
by TessB
August 28th, 2010, 3:52 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Timesurfers Take two posted 30 Aug
Replies: 7
Views: 1110

Query Timesurfers Take two posted 30 Aug

Take two of this query is posted at post 6 on this thread - all comments very much appreciated.