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by Tzalaran
August 12th, 2010, 8:56 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Crit - SotA
Replies: 14
Views: 2371

Re: Query Crit - SotA

After feedback from my beta readers, and another revision pass resulting from that, i've reworked the query. ----- Being hunted is nothing new to Tzalaran. He’s run from mercenaries and warlocks for so long, hiding is a reflex. Upon arriving in Karat-Si’Zan, Tzal thought he could hide forever in the...
by Tzalaran
June 2nd, 2010, 10:31 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Sentence Beginnings
Replies: 9
Views: 1765

Re: Sentence Beginnings

Writing in first person will do this in parts, mostly because of what cheekychook said. You are trying to move the character through too many things and get to the next major scene or part. Revising them just takes careful study, and creative ways of addressing the same points while removing the i. ...
by Tzalaran
February 16th, 2010, 6:43 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Favorite Lines from Novels
Replies: 30
Views: 5373

Re: Favorite Lines from Novels

"The machinery of government is always subordinate to the will of those operating that machinery." Herbert, taken from 'God Emperor of Dune' "For can not the mind create a heaven of hell, and a hell of heaven." Milton, taken from 'Paradise Lost' Those two quotes have been my signature in certain for...
by Tzalaran
February 12th, 2010, 7:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Crit - SotA
Replies: 14
Views: 2371

Re: Query Crit - SotA

@JQ - thanks for the tips. i did a final tweak and then revisited your comments. Now i know why i changed what i did. i've gotten through my revision, and i think it is time to see what kind of feedback i get on this version. If you see any glaring mistakes, please let me know. Thanks! --- Tzalaran ...
by Tzalaran
February 3rd, 2010, 11:00 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: 'The Job' - Short story for critique
Replies: 2
Views: 1369

'The Job' - Short story for critique

Wrote this a while ago, and just got around to revising it. It is a scene that didn't fit in the timeline of the novel, featuring the main character and the encounter that triggers his arc in the novel (well, the arc i'm revising in anyway). It is going to be posted to my blog (which is basically ju...
by Tzalaran
February 3rd, 2010, 10:06 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Band Names if I had a band
Replies: 15
Views: 3039

Re: Band Names if I had a band

i'd perform in a band called "Blunt Force Traumas". Played bass and did some drum beats for a band called "Del Negro" (members are friends of mine).

'AmalgaNation' is another name that crossed my mind. (Straight Metal head here, if you couldn't tell) ;)
by Tzalaran
January 31st, 2010, 10:31 am
Forum: Books
Topic: What are you reading now?
Replies: 520
Views: 133878

Re: What are you reading now?

my youngest son made me a deal, i'd read the Ranger's Apprentice series that he bought for christmas, and he'd read a book i selected for him. Over the past 5 days i read books 1-5 (all that is out in paperback in the states, Aussies have the advantage with book 9 released there). Also picked up The...
by Tzalaran
January 24th, 2010, 10:33 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: NFL Sunday Celebrate or Commiserate here.
Replies: 24
Views: 4750

Re: yoo-hoo.....Knight_Tour? Are you around?

Tzalaran, we will know by the end of the day whether or not the Bucs curse holds. Go Saints! The Bucco Bruce curse could still hold up, and from what i saw today the Saints won't beat the Colts. Our local channels have been out for over a month, so i didn't get to watch any of the playoff games unt...
by Tzalaran
January 15th, 2010, 6:51 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: how many projects do you work on at a time?
Replies: 14
Views: 2351

Re: how many projects do you work on at a time?

as many as i have to, the key is just to know when you are dividing you attention to so many projects that progress in all of them stop. Each person has a different limit for this, and some people can't be productive without 3-4 projects sitting on their plate. i have to limit it to 2-3 or i get not...
by Tzalaran
January 11th, 2010, 6:35 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Advice From Amateurs?
Replies: 17
Views: 3159

Re: Advice From Amateurs?

i don't worry about if someone is un/published when they are giving me advice, i worry about the quality of that advice. Tips or comments that i find useful, i use and thank the person, those that aren't useful i ignore and thank the person for their time.
by Tzalaran
January 9th, 2010, 7:55 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Recommended Fantasy Under 150K
Replies: 25
Views: 4126

Re: Recommended Fantasy Under 150K

On a separate note, perhaps there is somebody wandering through these forums (maybe even Nathan himself!) that could enlighten us all as to the word limit cap for fantasy submissions. I've never been able to find a good answer... There is no hard set limit, and it varies from agent to agent from wh...
by Tzalaran
January 9th, 2010, 10:55 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Favorite Wii Games?
Replies: 17
Views: 3226

Re: Favorite Wii Games?

We got our sons a Wii for christmas. Super Mario Bros Wii is a terrific game, all 4 of us have played it extensively. The other games that get a lot of play in our house: We love golf, FIFA 2009, and Star Wars: The Force Unleashed. Raymon Raving Rabbids is also an absolute blast (mostly just to watc...
by Tzalaran
January 8th, 2010, 12:11 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: NFL Sunday Celebrate or Commiserate here.
Replies: 24
Views: 4750

Re: NFL Sunday Celebrate or Commiserate here.

was a strange year. lots of really bad teams. Whole AFC looks pretty tough, should be some great games in that conference. NFC could be a real Jekyll and Hyde scenario, those teams are either brilliant or lose to the Bucs. :S (i mean, what were Green Bay and New Orleans doing losing to this team? i ...
by Tzalaran
January 5th, 2010, 9:43 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: To Trilogy or not to Trilogy - Why is that a question?
Replies: 11
Views: 1819

Re: To Trilogy or not to Trilogy - Why is that a question?

my opinion is that it stems from the 3 act structure of greek and roman drama. generally a story arc fits nicely into 3 installments, and therefore it is easy to split things in that manner. There are plenty of series that don't adhere to the trilogy (Taltos series, Sword of Truth series, Tiger and ...
by Tzalaran
December 25th, 2009, 2:14 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Hahaha....why on earth?
Replies: 6
Views: 1316

Re: Hahaha....why on earth?

Generally, the foe setting allows you to ignore that person's posts (they are not displayed) and they are not allowed to post in threads you start. Each forum tends to handle the feature a little bit differently though...