Georgetown losing hurt. Ouch. Had them all the way to the Elite Eight.
Only had 5 wrong, (as long as Syracuse wins) but losing an Elite Eight already hurts.
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- March 19th, 2011, 12:25 am
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: Bransford Blog Bracket Challenge!!!
- Replies: 110
- Views: 61669
- August 19th, 2010, 12:36 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Heaven - Rev. 1
- Replies: 19
- Views: 7509
Re: Query: Heaven
Dear Agent, I am seeking representation for my science fiction novel of approximately 100,000 words, titled Heaven. I thought that you might be a good agent for this project based on (whatever). Early in the 22nd century, Earth has been destroyed passive by the Alien Hordes, and humankind stands on...
- August 19th, 2010, 12:19 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - Hidden in Shadows - Take 2
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2268
Query - Hidden in Shadows - Take 2
I would appreciate any comments on this query, thanks! Assassin Lorna McCloud has an advantage over her victims – the power to create and hide in artificial shadows; however, the one target she longs for most remains elusive – her father's murderer. With no leads, Lorna continues to accept assignmen...
- June 23rd, 2010, 1:07 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7971
Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
Thank you so much for your help, everyone! I think I'm getting close: "Why am I a hired assassin? Two reasons. One, because it pays well. Extremely well. And two, because I can." In her heart, Lorna knows the real reason stems back to her father’s murder. While trying to track down his kil...
- June 19th, 2010, 12:24 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7971
Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
"Why am I a hired assassin? Two reasons. One, because it pays well. Extremely well. And two, because I can." A psychiatrist would disagree, saying Lorna's occupation stems back to her father, and his murder. Which is also true, but after so many years, she doubts she'll ever have her reven...
- June 18th, 2010, 4:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7971
Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
Why am I a hired assassin? Two reasons. One, because it pays well. Extremely well. And two, because I can. But a psychiatrist would disagree, saying Lorna's occupation stems back to her father, and his murder. Which is also true, but after so many years, she doubts she'll ever have her revenge. Whil...
- June 18th, 2010, 3:42 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7971
Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
Yet another try, this time from Lorna's POV. Since I can't seem to get the pitch just right, I thought this might help. Why am I a hired assassin? Two reasons. One, because it pays well. Extremely well. And two, because I can. But a psychiatrist would disagree, saying that my occupation stems back t...
- June 15th, 2010, 3:32 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 184902
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Nathan Bransford: Assassin Lorna McCloud has an advantage over her victims – the power to create and hide in artificial shadows; however, the one target she longs for most remains elusive – her father's murderer. With no leads, Lorna continues to accept assignments including a small island king...
- June 13th, 2010, 5:17 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7971
Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
I think I was trying to shove too much information into the pitch. It always seems that if you add in too many details, the more questions are raised. So I tried to scale back and came up with this: Lorna McCloud pretends she's an assassin for the money and because she's good at it. The real reason ...
- June 12th, 2010, 5:01 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7971
Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
latest version: Dear Agent: "Why am I a hired assassin? Two reasons. One, because it pays well. Extremely well. And two, because I can." In her heart, Lorna knows the real reason stems back to her father’s murder. While trying to track down his killer, Lorna is captured by the Paranormal I...
- February 17th, 2010, 2:09 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3997
Re: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
Hi Nicole: To tell the truth, your first query letter was difficult to read and follow. The revision was a bit better, but still there seems to be too much shoved in the query. Just the way I read it. Hope this helps. Aargh, conflicting advice. You think I have too much in the second version, but h...
- February 12th, 2010, 5:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3997
Re: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
Dear [insert agent's name]: I am seeking representation for my 80,000 word fantasy young adult novel, THE LAND OF IMAGINING. I would move this to right before "Thank you..." Alexia thinks she’s just an ordinary girl with a lofty goal – to become a best-selling novelist. Comma But a magica...
- February 12th, 2010, 3:07 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3997
Re: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
Attempt #2: Alexia thinks she’s just an ordinary girl with a lofty goal – to become a best-selling novelist. With the use of a magical pen, Alexia writes about a mystical Land of Imagining inhabited by a race called the All-Knowers. A great evil threatens the land - the Head Demon and Its minions se...
- February 11th, 2010, 7:28 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for 'Hard Rock'- Commercial Fiction
- Replies: 11
- Views: 5128
Re: Query for 'Hard Rock'- Commercial Fiction
Dear Ms. Agent: Smart-mouthed gumshoe, Delete comma Guy Morgan doesn't work much; comma not semicolon but he does drink half his weight in whisky whiskey each day, while exposing the occasional insurance fraud or matrimonial infidelity. When Guy’s old high school nemesis, rock star, Marc Sloane, del...
- February 11th, 2010, 7:21 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: What love may do
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3856
Re: QUERY: What love may do
Upon first reading your query, I assumed it was a YA fantasy with some romance thrown in. Your query does not yet reflect a horror story. It's important that the query reflects the writing behind it. I know others have said this, but I think it bears repeating, a 13 year old and a centuries-old vamp...