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by a3writer
September 6th, 2010, 5:20 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3
Replies: 32
Views: 4577

Re: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3

Dear Agent, Vampire mania floods bookstores, theaters, even cable, and Reece Paine believes our world isn’t ready for the truth. Fiction may not be fact, but she thinks that a vampire with a demon spouse and flying toddler might be a bit more than her neghbors can swallow. Consulting for a secret pa...
by a3writer
September 6th, 2010, 5:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Attempt #3 Query: Blood and Stones (4th message in)
Replies: 6
Views: 1031

Re: Revised (#2) Query: Blood and Stones

All right, time for attempt 3 (at least on the forums. I think this is query incarnation 600 or so.) Dear Agent, Knowledge isn't power; it's trouble. Occult Detective Matt Allen knows about the supernatural, but he's an ordinary joe. He relies on his wits and his gun; too bad guns have more boast th...
by a3writer
September 4th, 2010, 9:31 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Attempt #3 Query: Blood and Stones (4th message in)
Replies: 6
Views: 1031

Attempt #3 Query: Blood and Stones (4th message in)

It's time to try this again. The original thread can be found here: http://forums.nathanbransford.com/viewtopic.php?f=13&t=2138 And now to the revision. Dear Agent, Knowledge isn't power; it's trouble. Occult Detective Matt Allen gets no power from knowing where to look in the shadows to find mystic...
by a3writer
September 4th, 2010, 9:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3
Replies: 32
Views: 4577

Re: Revised WHAT A PAINE! please read!!! ;)

Dear Dream Agent, Being labeled an undead bloodsucker married to a demon doesn’t mesh with Reece Paine’s idea of what a working mama ought to be. Those overblown rumors about vampires haven’t encouraged her to come out of the closet either. She’s married to a demon and freelances at a bureau secretl...
by a3writer
September 4th, 2010, 4:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3
Replies: 32
Views: 4577

Re: Revised WHAT A PAINE! please read!!! ;)

Dear Dream Agent, Being labeled an undead bloodsucker doesn’t mesh with Reece Paine’s idea of what a working mama ought to be. Awesome. Knowing those things are just overblown rumors about vampires hasn’t encouraged her to come out of the closet either. Just a little trim to tighten it down She’s ma...
by a3writer
September 4th, 2010, 12:42 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3
Replies: 32
Views: 4577

Re: Big Changes WHAT A PAINE! Query

AmyAshley, I am also a Moore-on, and Bloodsucking Fiends is one of my favorite books. I've also read a bit of urban fantasy, so it's hard to get the idea of a dark, gritty world laced with the supernatural yet have a Chris Moore approach. It's hard to maintain any sense of impending doom with the Em...
by a3writer
September 3rd, 2010, 7:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3
Replies: 32
Views: 4577

Re: Big Changes WHAT A PAINE! Query

This is where the whole forum process gets messy, as I think you've got some good stuff in here. Dear Agent, My novel, WHAT A PAINE!, is a quick-moving, kooky urban fantasy novel with a women’s fiction feel. It should appeal to fans of Christopher Moore, Janet Evanovich, and Kim Harrison. Move this ...
by a3writer
September 3rd, 2010, 2:51 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Blood and Stones Revision 1
Replies: 14
Views: 2204

Re: Query: Blood and Stones Revision 1

Thanks to everyone who commented. I got some interesting perspective on it. So here is take 2. And I'm inclined to agree mostly with D.S. The plot is already in there, what I believe everyone was actually after was not plot, but conflict, so let's see if I succeeded. Dear Agent X, Knowledge isn't po...
by a3writer
August 31st, 2010, 4:09 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Blood and Stones Revision 1
Replies: 14
Views: 2204

Query: Blood and Stones Revision 1

It's time I take the plunge, so go ahead and let me have it with both barrels, people. Knowledge isn't power; it's trouble. Occult Detective Matt Allen knows enough to recognize a mysterious, glowing rock and a college kid under mind control. Tracking down the why and who means dealing with those th...
by a3writer
August 30th, 2010, 1:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4455

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

Maybe a different approach is to try and model it. Here is what I have garnered from your past queries. Dear Agent, After almost five years, Carmine Caudatus has almost fulfilled the demon contract. Unfortunately, his time is almost up. If he can find the Wheel of Fate before the contract expires, ...
by a3writer
August 30th, 2010, 12:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: WHAT A PAINE! edited yet again
Replies: 13
Views: 2108

Re: WHAT A PAINE! Edited 3114th try

Dear Agent BOZO, In the interview with______, you said _______. My 70, 000 word novel, WHAT A PAINE!, might be just the thing to buzz your senses. It’s an urban fantasy that should appeal to moms trying to juggle diapers and other duties. I know you think it sets the tone, but the agents don't care ...
by a3writer
August 29th, 2010, 7:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: HARP-BROKEN--latest version at end..thanks for input!
Replies: 14
Views: 2763

Re: Query: HARP-BROKEN

I'm seeking representation for The whole point of a query is to seek representation. They know this. No need to waste words on it. YA fantasy HARP-BROKEN, complete at 67,000 words. Put this down at the bottom. Hook them first, then give the stats for the book. Based on Irish mythology, it should ap...
by a3writer
August 29th, 2010, 4:34 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4455

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

Yes, you do need backstory. We need to know the why of the whole quest, but you don't want to do an infodump at the beginning. Doing an infodump is a lot like a prologue, which is something else agents aren't crazy about. Weave the backstory into the query. Make sure you start off with where the rea...
by a3writer
August 29th, 2010, 1:15 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: The Enemy Within - Final Take, Page 3
Replies: 25
Views: 3409

Re: Query: The Enemy Within (Take 2 or maybe 3)

The explanations are good, but they're also problematic. None of these questions has a quick, easy answer that you can throw into a query. They're major plot points, and the trick is to find a way of incorporating the things you need in there with the things you can readily keep the agent from going...
by a3writer
August 28th, 2010, 6:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4455

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

When Carmine Caudatus was eight-years-old, he lost his best friend and servant to murder. With the Power of the Rose and his genius mind, he attempted to reanimate Thomas with clockworks. However, without a soul, a body is just an empty vessel, and he was forced to open a contract with the Fallen W...