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by Awriter
September 30th, 2010, 2:21 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: First Light query. YA Fantasy
Replies: 18
Views: 2975

Re: First Light query {revised again}. YA Fantasy

Dear , If not remembering your past is bad then Ashalei Callister’s life is about to become hell. Confused about flashbacks she’s getting that seem like memories, but are from another era, memories about fighting, or loving somebody and hoping to be married, and memories of dying.[[ I'm not sure wh...
by Awriter
September 30th, 2010, 2:09 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Forsaken Ones Query-Paranormal novel
Replies: 10
Views: 1748

Re: Forsaken Ones Query-Draft Three

Dear, Agent A survivor of a dead race of Immortals the race who started it all; Ceili Lark is thrust upon a world she knows nothing about; the world behind the glamour. A world full of creatures that belong in the nightmares of children, and things that should only be in fairy tales: Pixies, Immorta...
by Awriter
September 24th, 2010, 5:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Forsaken Ones Query-Paranormal novel
Replies: 10
Views: 1748

Re: Forsaken Ones Query-Paranormal novel

Thank you notw and Fishfood for your advice :) And letting me know that its really really vague. I'll work on it right away :)
by Awriter
September 24th, 2010, 2:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query for a Fantasy novel 3rd Draft!!
Replies: 17
Views: 2348

Re: Query for a Fantasy novel.

Hi Debra! Emma, a Christmas Angel, lands, torn and bleeding, in the arms of a vampire. I really think that this first sentence needs something more too it if you are going to keep it as the opening for the query. And I sort of find it a little bit confusing. "lands, torn and bleeding, in the arms of...
by Awriter
September 24th, 2010, 2:22 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Forsaken Ones Query-Paranormal novel
Replies: 10
Views: 1748

Forsaken Ones Query-Paranormal novel

This is my first post here, also the first query I've posted anywhere. And the first one I have ever written so feedback your be amazing! And I'll give you feedback on your query (not sure if I'm totally qualified to, but at least I can tell you is something doesn't make sense right?) Anyways, so he...