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by Neil Larkins
June 14th, 2017, 11:38 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 45
Views: 22315

Re: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Author: Neil Larkins Title: THE LAST TIME YOU FALL - Three Weeks When Love Meant Everything and Acceptance Meant More Genre: YA, Dual Memoir ...Then the obvious struck me: Write this just as it happened and start here, the Freshman Mixer, the first social event of the fall semester at the two-year l...
by Neil Larkins
July 6th, 2012, 10:24 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: OK to seek publisher for previously published work?
Replies: 2
Views: 1268

Re: OK to seek publisher for previously published work?

Greatly appreciated! :D This clears the way to revert to my fallback position, which was to publish it as an e-book. With two smaller works already on Smashwords, this will be a significant addition. And, should I decide to self-publish in paper, I can easily do that since I own the copyright. Thank...
by Neil Larkins
July 2nd, 2012, 11:14 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: OK to seek publisher for previously published work?
Replies: 2
Views: 1268

OK to seek publisher for previously published work?

Hi, Nathan-- Back in 2004 I naively submitted my only major work to an outfit that billed itself as a "traditional" publisher. (They were anything but that and I won't say what the firm's name is, though I believe you and most readers here know who.) Back then I knew next to nothing about the publis...
by Neil Larkins
August 11th, 2011, 5:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

You can do it. Your love for Theresa will keep yourself from making those kind of mistakes. It's a hard balancing act in life as well as in writing (I have the same apologetic compulsion and have had the same lack of understanding from people I love, but also acceptance from those who matter most)....
by Neil Larkins
August 11th, 2011, 2:12 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

Neil Larkin : It's a problem of mine, too. My first chapter is rife with unneeded infodumps that I'll be sifting through for a while. Another one of my problems with this wip is the balancing act: Allowing the Teresa character to present herself as close as possible to the real Teresa without becom...
by Neil Larkins
August 10th, 2011, 11:49 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

Neil Larkin : Nice introduction to your characters voice and inner/outer struggles, but I think some of the exposition could've been added in later. The scene is relatable and enlightening at the same time, the suspense draws me in, and I enjoy your writing style. Thanks, Avery. When to add exposit...
by Neil Larkins
August 8th, 2011, 4:54 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

Neil - Your story broke my heart a little bit. To love and loose is a terrible thing (coincidentally, I know that all to intimately, and my story involves a man named Neil...). To tell Theresa's story this way seems like a beautiful way to remember and honor her. Best of luck to you. Thanks, dios4v...
by Neil Larkins
August 8th, 2011, 4:47 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

I'll play. ;) (Incidentally, this is the WIP that I need some help with my tag line on - if anyone has any input, the thread's here http://forums.nathanbransford.com/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=4027. Thanks!) --- I know the statue’s supposed to symbolize the spirit of the Cairumen people, but it looks like...
by Neil Larkins
August 8th, 2011, 1:57 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

Neil - Your story broke my heart a little bit. To love and loose is a terrible thing (coincidentally, I know that all to intimately, and my story involves a man named Neil...). To tell Theresa's story this way seems like a beautiful way to remember and honor her. Best of luck to you. Thanks, dios4v...
by Neil Larkins
August 8th, 2011, 1:18 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

Now that I finally have time to sit down and read all of these, here are my reviews of newer entries: Neil Larkins – Of all the openings I’ve read in this thread (and I’ve read and commented on them all), this one is the one that I felt the most keenly. Maybe it’s because I can relate to your prota...
by Neil Larkins
August 7th, 2011, 10:16 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

Outside the Copperhead Bar, Jeff Adams pumped another shell into the chamber of his shotgun. He approached the figure writhing in pain on the hard packed dirt that served as the parking lot of the establishment. It was difficult for him to believe the scrawny punk with the big belt-buckled wrangler...
by Neil Larkins
August 6th, 2011, 5:00 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP
Replies: 126
Views: 29325

Re: 250 Word Sharathon--post the opening of your WIP

[Man, I hate that: I was just about finished with my post when - bang! - "Web page has expired" Lost it all. Try it again.] Here's my WIP, though not my only one. It started out some eight years ago as a completed novel that I submitted to a POD publisher. I liked it enough, but like all authors wis...
by Neil Larkins
November 19th, 2010, 5:55 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 120225

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Mr. Bransford: This is my query/synopsis. Thanks for making this possible. Title: Destiny's Hammer Genre: Epic YA Fantasy/Adventure Length: 183,000 words, Prologue, 35 Chapters in 4 parts, 2-part Epilogue Extended synopsis - "It is 1963. Frances is a lonely fourteen year-old struggling for survival ...
by Neil Larkins
August 17th, 2010, 4:27 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283088

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Destiny's Hammer Genre: Early teen Fantasy/Adventure Word count: 246 If she could get her stupid crutches to work better she'd never be late to class. Buy why expect more? Crutches were crutches, mere sticks of wood held together with bolts after all, not meant as substitute for functioning l...