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- June 14th, 2011, 10:03 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Courier--Young Adult Query--Round Two Posted :)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4067
Re: The Courier--Young Adult Query--Round Two Posted :)
All right--thanks for your suggestions! Here's another go-round: It’s been a century since the Collapse, and the Colony is thriving. Seventeen-year-old Norah Falconer is set to apprentice under her father as Courier, becoming the first woman in the occupation. Despite her prowess navigating the fore...
- June 14th, 2011, 2:40 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: YA Fantasy Query: THE DRAGON'S NEPHEW
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5873
Re: YA Fantasy Query: THE DRAGON'S NEPHEW
I've been working on this query for a while. I've gotten some great feedback, and I like this a lot more than previous versions. But I miss stuff. Any and all feedback is appreciated :) Please and thank you. --------------- Dear Agent, Chris Drake hunts dragons with an assault rifle. That’s a prett...
- June 14th, 2011, 11:40 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE ENEMY WITHIN (Historical Fiction): New Version - Page 3
- Replies: 41
- Views: 15604
Re: New Query: THE ENEMY WITHIN (Historical Fiction)
Hi! This has really developped nicely from the first go, so I only have a couple of nitpicks. Ignore at will :) I tried to iron out a few things in the last paragraph. But I wonder if it's more confusing or overkill. I could use some thoughts on this. I sent this query out to five agents on Thursday...
- June 14th, 2011, 10:17 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Falling
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5192
Re: Query - The Falling
Hi RMorris :) I noticed that you posted a second try, but I have to confess--I think this first round was better. That's my opinion, but from what I could gather from the posts, you have a multi-POV novel and were trying to fashion it into the general query template, which favors one POV. It's my op...
- June 13th, 2011, 8:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Courier--Young Adult Query--Round Two Posted :)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4067
The Courier--Young Adult Query--Round Two Posted :)
Hi All! I'd appreciate any feedback or suggestions on the query for my young adult post-apocalyptic novel The Courier. Anything that's unclear, please point out--I've been too close to this for too long :) Thanks! *Edit* Revision Posted Below. It’s been a century since the Collapse, and the Colony i...
- June 13th, 2011, 8:04 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1896
Re: Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
Hi John :) I'll take a stab at looking over your query--though be warned, I'm no expert :) Dear Ms. Carson, What happens when a sixteen-year-old girl and her eighteen-year-old adopted brother fall in love? I feel like I see the advice "never start with a rhetorical question" fairly often--...
- October 6th, 2010, 12:48 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Digging your Way out of Critique Group Pitfalls
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1464
Re: Digging your Way out of Critique Group Pitfalls
Thanks, Sylvia! Great point--time is better spent working with writers you feel like you can actually help. I know I've felt that--not that a potential partner's work wasn't good (even really good) but that I just couldn't help them, because I Just Didn't Get It. Are there "it's not you, it's m...
- October 5th, 2010, 9:53 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Digging your Way out of Critique Group Pitfalls
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1464
Digging your Way out of Critique Group Pitfalls
Critique groups are pretty much the best thing to happen to a writer since the invention of moveable type. A communal effort where you gain on both sides of the exchange--your writing is improved when others look at it, and lo and behold, you improve your writing by looking at others' work! Incredib...
- August 31st, 2010, 8:23 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Blood and Stones Revision 1
- Replies: 14
- Views: 5259
Re: Query: Blood and Stones
Hi! I like how your voice comes out in this passage, and I love the concept--feels like classic noir meets paranormal. Love the twist on the genres. It's time I take the plunge, so go ahead and let me have it with both barrels, people. Knowledge isn't power; it's trouble. Occult Detective Matt Allen...
- August 30th, 2010, 5:35 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: December--Your Help Needed!
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3463
Re: Query: December--Your Help Needed!
Thank you all so much--I think I've got it, and your comments helped me so much as I worked to refine this. All the best, everyone!
- August 24th, 2010, 7:30 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: December--Your Help Needed!
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3463
Re: Query: December--Revision--Your Help (still) Needed!
Thanks so much for your help! It looks like I have a second problem--not wanting to give everything away, but still make the story intriguing. Thanks for helping me see that. Here's round two--hopefully clearer: It’s December 1945, but the first peacetime Christmas after World War II holds few tidin...
- August 24th, 2010, 2:36 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Silent No More
- Replies: 22
- Views: 8056
Re: Query: Silent No More
Agreed with wilderness when it comes to how to submit--can't hurt to have a proposal for those agents who might want it. I also agree that this should be your story, not a history, but--I do think any facts stated in the book should be as well-researched as possible. So, if a certain court case or p...
- August 24th, 2010, 1:26 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query- Riding on the Tail of the Devil
- Replies: 29
- Views: 9523
Re: Query- Riding on the Tail of the Devil
Wow--nice job with the edit. This is much clearer now for the most part, so great work! I've made comments inline in spots. Here's my new letter. ------------------------------------------------ Dear Agent: RIDING ON THE TAIL OF THE DEVIL is an 80,000 word fantasy featuring vampires, reincarnation, ...
- August 24th, 2010, 1:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Silent No More
- Replies: 22
- Views: 8056
Re: Query: Silent No More
Whoops--forgot to mention--I think I've mostly read that, unlike most other forms of nonfiction, you query memoir like you query fiction--that is, unless the agent specifies otherwise, you need a complete manuscript rather than a proposal. Sorry for missing that detail--anyone know anything else abo...
- August 24th, 2010, 8:38 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Silent No More
- Replies: 22
- Views: 8056
Re: Query: Silent No More
First off, you deserve huge kudos for your courage in writing about this--hats off to you. I think the first three short paragraphs are great--I read without stopping through "I was one of them" which was very gripping. Only nitpick would be that The "Pentagon investigates, unit comma...