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by fersnerfer
February 20th, 2011, 9:09 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: We're not just writers, share your artistic talents!
Replies: 62
Views: 12811

Re: We're not just writers, share your artistic talents!

Guardian wrote:Nice models! The ships in Eve has a really good and classy design. I always liked them. I also made ship models in the past, but unfortunately a shelf, above their shelf, had a loose bolt and killed all of them when it's fallen down. It was a sad day...

That almost physically hurt me to read. :(
by fersnerfer
February 20th, 2011, 2:22 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: We're not just writers, share your artistic talents!
Replies: 62
Views: 12811

Re: We're not just writers, share your artistic talents!

I went through a phase where I made a bunch of papercraft models of Eve Online ships until I ran out of places to put them.

http://www.flickr.com/photos/pupumonkey/sets/
by fersnerfer
February 20th, 2011, 2:18 pm
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 338908

I just made a blog

Not really sure what I'm doing with it yet. It is mostly just personal opinions and rants. Enter at your own risk.

http://marlanesque.wordpress.com/
by fersnerfer
February 18th, 2011, 11:19 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Born to Bondage query II
Replies: 23
Views: 4049

Re: Born to Bondage query II

I feel your pain GaoYuQing. It really is that subjective. Have you tried reading QueryCShark's blog? She has some very good pointers (as she shreds queries apart) and I felt that I learned a lot from her website. one of the things that I found most frustrating was just how subjective the whole proce...
by fersnerfer
February 17th, 2011, 9:41 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Born to Bondage query II
Replies: 23
Views: 4049

Re: Born to Bondage query II

I am going to put my comments in blue. Really in light of all the query version's I've done now this number would be more like alphabet soup, but this particular one has been revised in light of the helpful comments made following the first post. Paul Neilsson is a broken man. His job, self-esteem, ...
by fersnerfer
February 17th, 2011, 3:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3

thanks for the feedback and sorry if I came across as too desperate there. Just trying to keep the momentum going.
by fersnerfer
February 15th, 2011, 10:11 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3

Bump?

Or is it perfect now?

I know it can't be perfect.
by fersnerfer
February 11th, 2011, 5:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

One more time

Take III Thanks again for all the suggestions! ---- Skyla has been called a witch her entire life, but she never thought they meant it literally. Up until now, Skyla was just a girl unpopular at school, a girl who sees stories in people’s shadows as they play against the walls. She always thought it...
by fersnerfer
February 10th, 2011, 5:40 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 2

Before I revise, I want to say thanks for catching the multiple uses of words. That is one of my most annoying pet peeves about my own writing and it always seems to be a blind spot for me when I edit.


I'll digest and revise in a day or two. This feedback is great everyone. I appreciate it.
by fersnerfer
February 9th, 2011, 10:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 2

Take III I decided to go with removing the "Skyla runs for her life" bit. I also tried to clarify the plot a bit more. Tell me what you think. Thanks for all the help! ---- Skyla has been called a witch her entire life, but she never thought they meant it literally. Up until now, Skyla has just been...
by fersnerfer
February 9th, 2011, 4:59 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 2

Thanks for the feedback! Will digest and revise in a couple days!


BTW - Am I the only one who just hates writing both queries and synopsis?
by fersnerfer
February 6th, 2011, 11:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK

Take II. Thanks again for all the helpful comments. ------------------------------------- Beneath airships and mountainous cathedrals, through the streets of a walled city, Skyla runs for her life. Skyla had been called a witch her entire life, but she never thought they meant it literally. Up until...
by fersnerfer
February 6th, 2011, 12:05 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK

I think you make some excellent points.

Thanks!
by fersnerfer
February 4th, 2011, 11:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK

Thanks for more feedback. BTW, Dankrubis, I am curious which part of the last line you felt was corny. I understand that I might have gone a little over the top, but I am curious where exactly, you felt I crossed the line. :) Just wondering if you could go into a finer detail on it. And I do mean th...
by fersnerfer
February 4th, 2011, 2:30 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 3837

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK

I appreciate the feedback. I'll digest and give it another revision in a couple days.

Thanks again!