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by burnburn
August 17th, 2010, 12:09 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 193217

Re: Ask Nathan

I have a question about writing a query letter for a novel I would consider an ensemble piece. Basically, the novel shifts back and forth between the story/viewpoint of multiple characters who were all affected by the same incident. Given the limited space of a query letter synopsis, should I focus ...
by burnburn
August 12th, 2010, 3:36 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Far - Mainstream
Replies: 10
Views: 1810

Re: Query - Far - Mainstream - Revised

Again, thanks for the replies and thoughts. It shouldn't be harder to write a short query letter than a novel!!!!!!!!!!!!! Should it? I still don't think it's where I want it to be, but I think this version addresses some of the issues with earlier versions. Although I'm quite certain there are stil...
by burnburn
August 9th, 2010, 6:18 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: 1st Query Letter - The Oracle's Revenge
Replies: 12
Views: 2190

Re: 1st Query Letter - The Oracle's Revenge

Hi - Below are my thoughts. This is not a genre I generally read so keep that in mind if any of my comments seem off for the type of novel this is. Although, I should point out this actually sounds pretty interesting to me despite the fact it's not a genre I typically read. This is my first attempt ...
by burnburn
August 9th, 2010, 5:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Far - Mainstream
Replies: 10
Views: 1810

Re: Query - Far - Mainstream

Thanks all for your replies/thoughts/suggestions - they are all great and very much appreciated. Definitely they brought home how things that make sense in the space of a novel really don't make sense in the space of a synopsis. I know there was a question posed as to whether journalism student's ac...
by burnburn
August 7th, 2010, 11:18 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Far - Mainstream
Replies: 10
Views: 1810

Query - Far - Mainstream

Okay. I'll throw my synopsis into the fray here. Clearly, it's not perfect so fire away at will. :) And thanks in advance for any comments/suggestions/etc. Under suspicion for his girlfriend's mysterious death, Nick Connolly struggles to stay sober everyday while trying not to lose his job. That's a...
by burnburn
August 7th, 2010, 11:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - A Scorpion's Nature
Replies: 10
Views: 1504

Re: Query - A Scorpion's Nature

You've given me some great suggestions. Here is an updated version. Let me know what you think. Ryan Laraway rises for the youth court’s verdict, ashamed of his black eye. The "rises for the youth court's verdict" doesn't work for me. It might just be me, of course, but I think it might be better t...
by burnburn
August 6th, 2010, 11:08 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Meant To Be---another new version
Replies: 61
Views: 8099

Re: New super-short version of Query---Meant To Be---Comm. Fic

Okay, first there was the synopsis-ish version, then the book-blurb attempt...now there's a really short one, weighing in at only 143 words---which is usually about how long it takes me to begin a message board post ;) Hmm...first try 350 words, second try 250 words, third try 143 words...a few mor...
by burnburn
August 6th, 2010, 10:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - women's fiction
Replies: 17
Views: 2780

Re: Query - women's fiction

To clarify, I don't think there's an issue with him having HIV and being afraid to tell her at first. My main concern is that he might have given it to her. Is that essential to the plot? If it is, then I think you're best leaving that part for the novel - because getting readers to still feel sympa...
by burnburn
August 6th, 2010, 4:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - women's fiction
Replies: 17
Views: 2780

Re: Query - women's fiction

Hi - I'm new to this forum and new to the querying process myself, so please take all comments with that in mind. I am new to this forum (and new to writing queries!). I would appreciate any feedback on my query and synopsis. Here goes: Dear , I am an unpublished author seeking representation for my...