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by BRSloan
July 25th, 2010, 4:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alone With Everyone - Literary query
Replies: 10
Views: 1452

Re: Alone With Everyone - Literary query

Thank you to everyone who has responded. A lot of good information. I'll have to do a good bit of pondering on all the feedback and put that into a new version, but I wanted to go ahead and thank everyone. On the genre thing, I guess "mainstream" sounds the best. From the all the definitions I've re...
by BRSloan
July 24th, 2010, 12:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alone With Everyone - Literary query
Replies: 10
Views: 1452

Re: Alone With Everyone - Literary query

Thanks for the responses, both of you! HillaryJ: The religion she is in is the German Baptists, an obscure Christian sect that isn't very well known outside of the midwest, or even Indiana really. I originally had the name in the query, but it felt liek ti was wasting space. Maybe this new version d...
by BRSloan
July 24th, 2010, 1:09 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alone With Everyone - Literary query
Replies: 10
Views: 1452

Alone With Everyone - Literary query

This query has been a real dud, so I thought I'd put it up here to see if you guys could give me any input on it. I also did a complete rewrite from a different angle, but I really can't decide between the two, though I lean toward the first. Please let me know which you think is better, or if that'...
by BRSloan
July 23rd, 2010, 4:01 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Author Drawing! (Or name that author.)
Replies: 4
Views: 921

Author Drawing! (Or name that author.)

So I often distract myself from writing by drawing pictures of authors I love. I'm one of those people who was born with zero talent in the drawing department, but I've practiced enough to at least do portraits that look like the cousins of the subjects. I'm curious if people can guess the names of ...
by BRSloan
July 23rd, 2010, 2:49 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you celebrate finishing a book?
Replies: 30
Views: 8134

Re: How do you celebrate finishing a book?

Frozen pizza, coffee ice cream, and The Good The Bad and The Ugly. Ooooh yeah.
by BRSloan
July 23rd, 2010, 2:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Extraordinary Tale of Nicholas Pierce - Mainstrm
Replies: 27
Views: 4046

Re: Query - The Extraordinary Tale of Nicholas Pierce - Mainstrm

New version!!! Dear AGENT, Nicholas Pierce is missing five years of his life. When an unexplained package shows up on his front step, Nicholas' I know this is technically correct for the possessive, but you might consider "Nicholas's". I honestly don't know which agents would prefer, but it is easi...
by BRSloan
July 23rd, 2010, 2:23 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Forgotten Gods Query
Replies: 9
Views: 1282

Re: Forgotten Gods Query

Most of the critiques I'd give have already been given and worked on. It's already much better. But I'll second that you need some white space in this. As it is, it is a blob of text and very uninviting.