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Thanks! Just to clear things up-- I've taken this out, because way too many people didn't notice, but the wording says 'his' world. As in, Emil's world. Hatter is targeting the people Emil cares about. The supernatural twist-- which is the time thing, by the way-- is something kind of underlying for...

Hi everyone! This is the query for my YA thriller, Mad As A Hatter. Some of you may remember this from about a year ago. I queried it a bit, but some personal stuff got in the way for a while, as well as a problem I spotted in the books I had to fix. Also, I turned fifteen, which means you start loo...

Hey! First of all, I definitely like the concept. I can be kind of harsh, or so I'm told, but if I am it doesn't mean I don't think it's still pretty good. When pirates slaughter fourteen-year-old Sarah Whitman’s parents, she becomes a captive on the deadliest pirate ship in 18th century Hansa: the ...

Newest version! Dear Awesome Agent, London, 1882. Seven years ago, Emil Aleric and his sister were kidnapped. Emil survived. His sister didn’t. So when he hears news of a serial killer rampaging London, he’s convinced that his former abductor is on the move again. The peculiarities of the murders—a ...

Thank you for the advice! It's a young adult novel, though. YA.

Thanks! Here I go. Dear Awesome Agent, London, 1882. Seven years ago, Emil Aleric and his sister were kidnapped. Emil survived. His sister didn’t. So when word of a ruthless killer rampaging London convinces Emil that his kidnapper is on the move, he’s almost ecstatic to learn that his guardian, an ...

Okay, I worked through it a bit. Here's what I have. Be brutal, please! Dear Awesome Agent, London, 1882. Seven years ago, Emil Aleric and his sister were kidnapped. Emil survived. His sister didn’t. So when word of a ruthless killer rampaging London convinces Emil that his kidnapper is on the move,...

I honestly don't know how to explain without the end. Hmmm... well, his mother goes to the person she believes to be the head policeman of the Yard and asks them to protect her son. This person pulls the strings a bit and Emil ends up with Corwin, for his own reasons. That make sense?

Ooh, yes, that's true. Thanks. It's tough to remember that the reader doesn't know as much as I do. Dear Awesome Agent, London, 1882. Seven years ago, Emil Aleric and his sister were kidnapped. Emil survived. His sister didn’t. So when word of a ruthless killer rampaging London reaches home, his mot...

Thank you all so much for your help! I've tried to work your suggestions into my query. Here goes: Dear Awesome Agent, London, 1882. Seven years ago, Emil Aleric and his sister were kidnapped. Emil survived. His sister didn’t. So when word of a ruthless killer rampaging London reaches home, his moth...

Emil's only 14, actually. He was kidnapped at seven.

London, 1882. When Emil Aleric was a child, he was kidnapped. He and his mother survived. The rest of his family didn't. So the word of a ruthless killer rampaging London frightens his mother into sending Emil to live with Corwin James, the Scotland Yard officer in charge of the case. Every murder f...

Thank you! Actually, Officer Corwin James is like, the second main character. Half the chapters are in his point of view. But the actual story revolves around Emil, so I made the query about Emil. If you have any ideas of how to put him into the query, I'd love that!

Thanks! How's this? Dear Awesome Agent, London, 1882. Kidnapped as a child, Emil Aleric and his mother survived. The rest of the family didn't. So the word of a ruthless killer rampaging London frightens his mother into sending Emil to live with Officer Corwin James. Every murder follows the same pa...

Thank you for the help, everyone! - - - The year is 1882, and London is in a state of terror due to a string of brutal murders. Not the best way to enter the Yuletide season. When he was a child, a madman kidnapped fourteen-year-old Marquis Emil Aleric and his sister. Only Emil survived. So the word...