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by Ruth Hansen
July 23rd, 2010, 8:44 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Adventures of Puckatoo -MG
Replies: 4
Views: 862

Re: The Adventures of Puckatoo -MG

Sounds like a fun story.

I agree with Quill's observations.
Also, in the first paragraph, I'd insert the word "being" ...center of attention.

Good job & good Luck!
by Ruth Hansen
July 13th, 2010, 3:12 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 285044

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Sane Enough to Know She's Crazy Genre: Women's Fiction Word Count: 250 Her mind had never been so clouded, or so clear. “You can’t do this,” she told herself. Yet, as she approached the train station, Carrie wasn’t sure whether or not she would finally give in to him. He had been trying to co...