Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Great start to The Guilds End! I love the tension between Neros and the Arch-Mage. To improve, consider adding more world-building details and deepening Neros' internal conflict. Varying sentence structure could enhance the pacing, and a few hints about the boy's background would build intrigue. Kee...

Your query for The Son of Ashes sounds intriguing! I love the premise of a shut-in prince stepping up to save his realm. The comparison to Game of Thrones and Percy Jackson is a great touch. Best of luck with your submission—I'm excited to see where Leon's journey takes him!
the innocence test

Hello omegle I've just joined and I'm on the lookout for a critique partner. I'm currently immersed in writing the first book of a fantasy/sci-fi series titled "Arcane Engines." It's a blend of fantasy with a steampunk setting, featuring Veil's journey through Ithalaan Academy amidst myste...

It delves into themes of identity, cultural differences, and the complexities of human relationships. The vivid descriptions and poignant moments create a compelling story that draws the reader in. The use of sensory details and emotional depth adds richness to the narrative, making it a thought-pro...