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- January 20th, 2024, 3:40 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Page critique 1/18/24
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Re: Page critique 1/18/24
This is a great opening. My only suggestion is perhaps state the date on the newspaper that Papa has so the reader knows the time frame.
- December 22nd, 2023, 8:53 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: NEW - Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
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Re: NEW - Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Here is my most up-to-date query letter. It is part of a submission through QueryManager so does not have all the elements of an email query included. Dear []: It is a pleasure to make your acquaintance. I am querying you because of our shared love of stories with engaging characters and found famil...
- December 15th, 2023, 8:53 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
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First page- Curative Measures
February 1977 Was it lightning or thunder that swept this agony so swiftly through his head? Or gravity? Gravity had sucked a storm-splintered branch from a living tree through the air, pulling it to the ground, hadn’t it? And with tragic speed. No, lightning alone pumped pain into him. Thinking of ...