Nathan Bransford - The Forums

The dentist plot is relevant insofar as wanting to draw an early comparison with some of his character traits ie his own abject fear of dentists and pain vs his fearlessness and ruthless streak as a hitman, with no compunction at all for inflicting pain on others.

Grateful for any comments/crit on a few opening paragraphs of my wip. Thanks. I lay prostrate and incapacitated. A concentrated beam of blinding light penetrates through me. My eyes squinched, I stare up at dark, vacant eyes that seem cold and indifferent. Every sinew in my taut body is tense. Gripp...