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by alicef
September 10th, 2010, 8:25 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
Replies: 33
Views: 29460

Re: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10

I love the 60's and the blues. Perhaps you could name this trio. Is there music drifting through the street from a juke box inside? I'm guessing the three are witnesses to what is happening and not the main character. You say three musicians, where's the singer? I love the action in the last paragra...
by alicef
July 5th, 2010, 7:56 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 284674

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title:Got Guts? Genre: Middle grade Thanks. I wouldn’t mind giving up my room to some neglected kid in the foster care system; it’s having to bunk with my brother Ben that I’m not excited about. He’s two years older than me and in high school. Besides that, we don’t even have a kid moving in yet. Mo...