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by suesan0814
July 19th, 2010, 5:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: A life in Death - YA Fantasy *New Version, Page 4*
Replies: 41
Views: 6072

Re: A life in Death - YA Fantasy *New Version*

Once again, a big thanks to everyone who has helped me thus far. Here is my newest update. With this one, I have tried to omit things that caused confusion in previous queries and explain the others. As you can see, this one is a fair bit slimmer. Suggestions: (add) [ddelete]***comments Corvette O’...
by suesan0814
July 19th, 2010, 5:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein
Replies: 24
Views: 3550

Re: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein

Heather B wrote:Wow, congratulations!
Thanks for sharing the query, this is a book I'll be on the lookout for.
Thank you Heather.
by suesan0814
July 17th, 2010, 9:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Whip-Slip query
Replies: 68
Views: 8935

Re: The Whip-Slip query

thewhipslip wrote:Hey Susan - Thanks! I posted a revised version in a new post. Let me know what you think.

Will do!
by suesan0814
July 17th, 2010, 4:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Whip-Slip query
Replies: 68
Views: 8935

Re: The Whip-Slip query

Suggestions: (add)[delete]***comments Dear [Agent], Crack the Whip or let it Slip, the motto for a centuries-old war fought by soldiers endowed with the power of Life: the Slips, and those with the power of Death: the Whips. With one touch, the Slips can heal all illnesses and ailments. With anothe...
by suesan0814
July 17th, 2010, 4:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Mouths - YA Fantasy
Replies: 13
Views: 1982

Re: Mouths - YA Fantasy

Suggestions: (add) [delete] ***comments Dear AGENT OF AWESOME, The field trip to America’s Stonehenge should have been enjoyable. Except (L)olanthe’s scholarly buzz dissipates with every I’m-better-than-you vibe that emanates from primo-jock, Vidar. Then dungeons-and-dragons geek Derek invades (L)o...
by suesan0814
July 17th, 2010, 3:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5458

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

Bioengineer Gabriel Clarkson is a cappuccino addict and self-declared workaholic. Armed with nothing but sarcasm and tenacity, he's spent the last five years in his Vermont lab trying to cure cancer. A breakthrough earns him a fifteen million dollar grant, thus securing not only his research's futur...
by suesan0814
July 17th, 2010, 3:23 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein
Replies: 24
Views: 3550

Re: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein

Congratulations!!!! That was amazingly fast. Please do share your final query with us, so we can learn from it. :) Thanks Wilderness. Here is the query I sent to them: THE GRATEFUL UNDEAD: THEY'RE SO VEIN is an urban fantasy, completed at > 88,000 words. > > > There I was, fifty-eight, contemplatin...
by suesan0814
July 16th, 2010, 6:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein
Replies: 24
Views: 3550

Re: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein

It's official, I have contracted The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein, and it's scheduled to be out in July of next year. They also requested the second in the series, which I had to edit like mad for the last two weeks before sending it. Sorry for neglecting everyone here. I've been a train wreck. ...
by suesan0814
June 24th, 2010, 6:22 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein
Replies: 24
Views: 3550

Re: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein

wilderness wrote:
I did get two requests for partials and one full! Weeeeeeeeeeee! Wish me luck!
Congrats Susan! That's awesome. Not surprising either, since you have a great voice. :) Best of luck.

Thanks so much, wilderness. And now I wait. LOL I have my fingers crossed.
by suesan0814
June 24th, 2010, 6:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein
Replies: 24
Views: 3550

Re: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein

BethC wrote:You've got some good advice so I won't try to mess that up. I agree you would have to catch an agent in just the right mood since it doesn't read like the usual query and being in first person is discouraged. But all that said....I'm 58. Are they adopting?

LOL - sweetie - they have fangs!
by suesan0814
June 24th, 2010, 12:04 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein
Replies: 24
Views: 3550

Re: The Grateful Undead: They're So Vein

Hey susan!! I stopped by here and saw your query and you know how much I love Susan and the ladies!!!!! THE GRATEFUL UNDEAD: THEY'RE SO VEIN is a chick-lit, urban fantasy, completed at 88,000 words. move to the end One day I'm fifty-eight - the next day I'm a vampire looking twenty-five, and every ...
by suesan0814
June 22nd, 2010, 6:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
Replies: 20
Views: 3511

Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy

Dear Agent: I have not mastered writing a query, in fact mine has gone through many changes, but as I read I will offer my thoughts on yours. Hope I can help. Lorna McCloud likes to think she's an assassin for the money and because she's good at it. But the real reason, because she was traumatized ...
by suesan0814
June 22nd, 2010, 5:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query for Darkness Becomes Her
Replies: 23
Views: 3510

Re: Query for Darkness Becomes Her

I've never written a query before so any and all help is appreciated Thanks in advance! Hey, Jeannie, girl. Had to let you know I was here. Thanks for giving me the heads up on the site. I posted a query! Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! I've already gotten some great suggestions! So, let me put my 2cents in......
by suesan0814
June 22nd, 2010, 5:36 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: BLOOD WILL TELL, Urban Fantasy, Temporarily Retired
Replies: 34
Views: 5205

Re: BLOOD WILL TELL, Urban Fantasy, third version

The third version is on page 2. This is approximately the fourth version of the query for this novel. Have at it. Revised version below. I tried to take all of the feedback into account. I don't disagree with the advice to use something stronger than "plot" in the first paragraph. After three days,...
by suesan0814
June 22nd, 2010, 11:37 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query for Darkness Becomes Her
Replies: 23
Views: 3510

Re: Query for Darkness Becomes Her

Just wanted to let you know I was by, Jeanne. Since I just reviewed this, I won't copy and paste it here, again. Thanks, for sending me the site. Just uploaded my query yesterday and have already received some great suggestions! (you probably have already reviewed it also, several times. ha!) Thanks...