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- July 12th, 2010, 11:16 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 451793
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Title: Pawn's Gambit Genre: Contemporary Fantasy Word Count: 254 Steven Bauer clutched his stomach as a wave of pain ripped through him like a dull knife. Beads of sweat broke out on his forehead as an acid taste filled his mouth. “You don’t look so good.” Backlit by the enormous aquarium that loome...
- June 18th, 2010, 11:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7923
Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
I've heard it's very dangerous to write queries from the POV of the character. Unless you know the agent likes that sort of thing, stick to a 3rd person query, even if the book is in 1st. DK
- June 18th, 2010, 11:39 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Bond of Darkness Query
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4271
Re: Bond of Darkness Query
I think it would be interesting to know what the infection does to people. Actually, I think that is a symptom (pardon the pun) of a lack of specificity in the query. I would find a way to be more specific about Valence, the Warlord, the infection, and other things mentioned in your letter. Otherwis...
- June 18th, 2010, 11:33 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 183517
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Nathan: I am a frequent reader of your blog and appreciate the opportunity to participate in this exercise. Steven Bauer always thought chess was just a game, until the sexy brunette in the black dress did her level best to incinerate him. He is rescued from this literal baptism of fire by a wo...