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by DarinKennedy
July 12th, 2010, 11:16 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 284711

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Pawn's Gambit Genre: Contemporary Fantasy Word Count: 254 Steven Bauer clutched his stomach as a wave of pain ripped through him like a dull knife. Beads of sweat broke out on his forehead as an acid taste filled his mouth. “You don’t look so good.” Backlit by the enormous aquarium that loome...
by DarinKennedy
June 18th, 2010, 11:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
Replies: 20
Views: 3479

Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy

I've heard it's very dangerous to write queries from the POV of the character. Unless you know the agent likes that sort of thing, stick to a 3rd person query, even if the book is in 1st. DK
by DarinKennedy
June 18th, 2010, 11:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Bond of Darkness Query
Replies: 11
Views: 1919

Re: Bond of Darkness Query

I think it would be interesting to know what the infection does to people. Actually, I think that is a symptom (pardon the pun) of a lack of specificity in the query. I would find a way to be more specific about Valence, the Warlord, the infection, and other things mentioned in your letter. Otherwis...
by DarinKennedy
June 18th, 2010, 11:33 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 120832

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Nathan: I am a frequent reader of your blog and appreciate the opportunity to participate in this exercise. Steven Bauer always thought chess was just a game, until the sexy brunette in the black dress did her level best to incinerate him. He is rescued from this literal baptism of fire by a wo...