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Thanks for your valuable input. I'll take it into consideration when I polish it up a bit more :)

Jeanne

Thanks to everyone for the valuable assistance. Writing a query is never easy, but you've helped me a lot. I guess it's back to the drawing board with this one, lol.

Jeanne

Below is my second attempt at my query. I truly appreciate the invaluable feedback and suggestions I've received from this forum. Any advice is greatly appreciated since I suck at query writing. Thanks in advance. Dear Agent Lola wants to be invisible. Her funky, tattoo-covered parents don’t unders...

Hi - I like the first person POV, even though I know most queries are written in third person. That said, why not try both and see what kind of response you get. Send one version off and then try another (of course to different agents). The first person POV is fresh and exciting and gives the reader...

Thank you to both of you for the invaluable advice and suggestions. I find queries the hardest thing in the world to write and it helps so much to have an objective opinion. I agree with all the suggestions. The funny thing is I took the Writer's Digest course on query writing and that's where I was...

***note - the first three paragraphs are supposed to be indented as they are a direct quote from my novel. Dear [fill in the blank] “Lola, get your suit on and help supervise the pool. The more eyes the better,” Justine the pretty blonde, twenty-one-year-old camp director ordered once we were off t...

Thank you both, Adam and Mark. Your suggestions will absolutely make my query better. Much appreciated.
Jeanne

Thanks Quill - I so appreciate you pushing me to do better. Since I am intimately involved in my story, I cannot see my query through objective eyes so your input is extremely valuable. Off I go, back to the drawing board. :)

Okay, here is my new and hopefully improved query. Thanks to everyone for the valuable advice - I hope I've done you proud. Dear Mr. Bransford I am seeking representation for my paranormal thriller DARKNESS BECOMES HER. Dane Westwood is a vigilante, a warrior of the spirit world. She has the unique...

I've never written a query before so any and all help is appreciated Thanks in advance! Hey, Jeannie, girl. Had to let you know I was here. Thanks for giving me the heads up on the site. I posted a query! Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! I've already gotten some great suggestions! So, let me put my 2cents in......

Just wanted to let you know I was by, Jeanne. Since I just reviewed this, I won't copy and paste it here, again. Thanks, for sending me the site. Just uploaded my query yesterday and have already received some great suggestions! (you probably have already reviewed it also, several times. ha!) Thank...

Thanks Clara - I'll take your very insightful suggestions into consideration when I rewrite my query.
Jeanne

I completely disagree with the post above - you don't have to pay for anything to become a novelist, or to get your work published. If somebody wants money from you, I'd strongly advise you to tell them where to go. I'm sorry but I should have specified that the first month is free.This workshop is...

Thanks Quill for your excellent advice - I truly appreciate the time and effort you've put into critiquing my query.

Thanks to everyone. I've gotten some really incredible advice. I'll rework my query and post again. It's tougher than I thought to write a good one.