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by LSimon
July 22nd, 2010, 12:22 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: It's not fantasy. It's modern with some magic. What genre?
Replies: 7
Views: 1376

Re: It's not fantasy. It's modern with some magic. What genre?

The difference between Paranormal Romance and Urban Fantasy is the HEA (Happily Ever After). If at the end you have two people who are in love and have ever reason to think that they will forever be that way - it is PR. If not UF. This is pretty much exactly what Ginjer Buchanan said to me at the WR...
by LSimon
July 21st, 2010, 6:34 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283359

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

ALAMANDINE'S SONG- Urban Fantasy I sat at the back of the jewelry store curled up in the brown leather chair, hidden behind the glass display cases. We should have closed an hour before, but my Aunt Merelda was waiting for something. She streaked through the small store, touching this, straightening...
by LSimon
July 19th, 2010, 12:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query

To say that Alamandine “Mandi” Croach takes life as it comes would be an understatement. She chose her college because that was where her father taught before he died. Her mother left her a high-end jewelry store in Philadelphia, so that is where she lives and works. She accepts the existence of fae...
by LSimon
July 15th, 2010, 11:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query

So you don't think that her being a princess and possibly the next heir to the throne is enough reason for the faeries to start showing up? And you don't think that her father being murdered and her brother being kidnapped is a good reason for her to think she is in danger?
by LSimon
July 15th, 2010, 12:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query

It's long, but Let me know what you think! To say that Alamandine “Mandi” Croach takes life as it comes would be an understatement. She chose her college because that was where her father taught before he died. Her mother left her a jewelry store, so that is where she works. She accepts the existen...
by LSimon
July 14th, 2010, 8:21 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query

Going a different direction- Lemme know what you think. To say that Alamandine “Mandi” Croach takes life as it comes would be an understatement. She chose her college because that was where her father taught before he died. Her mother left her a jewelry store, so that is where she works. She accept...
by LSimon
July 12th, 2010, 12:04 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query** Newest Version Page 2

Dear Agent, Alamandine “Mandi” Croach may be next in line for the crown of the Star Court in Faelyn. Her younger half-brother has been kidnapped and even the strongest seekers cannot find him. But she doesn't know any of that. Her parents are dead, and though she and her full-fae aunt run a magical ...
by LSimon
July 8th, 2010, 11:23 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Re: ELEMENTUM - Fantasy (REVISION #1)
Replies: 9
Views: 1414

Re: ELEMENTUM - Fantasy

* Report this post * Reply with quote ELEMENTUM - Fantasy New postby CharleeVale » 06 Jul 2010, 03:18 My first ever draft of a query for my soon-to-be-finished MS! I'm looking for totally honest feedback! --- Maintaining world peace is hard enough, it’s even harder if you don’t know you’re the one m...
by LSimon
July 6th, 2010, 1:56 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis Alamandine's Song
Replies: 5
Views: 1431

Re: Synopsis Alamandine's Song

I'm Alamandine "Mandi" Croach - regular Philadelphia girl. I love the Italian Market, shopping on Chestnut Street and walking through Rittenhouse Park. I own a successful jewelry store. I am well educated, have a nice apartment, and great dog. Oh, I'm half-faery as well, but that didn't mean a thing...
by LSimon
July 5th, 2010, 9:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query

This is urban fantasy- Not high or epic fantasy. The fun is in the play between the magical and the mundane.
by LSimon
July 5th, 2010, 9:03 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Request from editor..include?
Replies: 3
Views: 815

Re: Request from editor..include?

Thank so much Nathan, I appreciate your time and input!
by LSimon
July 5th, 2010, 9:01 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: BOB - NOT the official title:) - YA dystopian *Take #3*
Replies: 32
Views: 5202

Re: BOB - NOT the official title:) - YA dystopian *Try #2*

I really like the new query. A query has one job to do- Present the agent with a character, a dilemma and a choice. You accomplished this. BTW I vote for Toothless for a title... but just my opinion.
by LSimon
July 1st, 2010, 8:27 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query

Dear Agent, Alamandine “Mandi” Croach is a half-faery princess, the next in line for the crown of the Star Court in Faelyn. Her younger half-brother has been kidnapped and even the strongest seekers cannot find him. But she doesn't know any of that. Her life revolves around her city, Philadelphia, h...
by LSimon
July 1st, 2010, 8:13 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis Alamandine's Song
Replies: 5
Views: 1431

Synopsis Alamandine's Song

I know I'm taking a risk here, but the story is told in the first person, so it just seemed natural to me. I'm Alamandine "Mandi" Croach - regular Philadelphia girl. I love the Italian Market, shopping on Chestnut Street and walking through Rittenhouse Park. I own a successful jewelry store. I am w...
by LSimon
July 1st, 2010, 4:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3247

Re: Alamandine's Song Query

Dear Agent, Alamandine “Mandi” Croach is a half-faery princess, the next in line for the crown of the Star Court in Faelyn. Her younger half-brother has been kidnapped and even the strongest seekers cannot find him. But she doesn't know any of that- her aunt has made sure of it. Her life revolves ar...