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- August 23rd, 2010, 1:02 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Preface & Ch. 1 Abigail Fellows & Wiccan Council-Paranormal
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2231
Re: Preface & Ch. 1 Abigail Fellows & Wiccan Council-Paranormal
PREFACE Not prologue? The auburn haired girl struggled for air as she pushed through trees. The branches tore flesh with every step. She glanced back and tripped over a protruding rock. She tried in vain to focus, but it was no use. Tears blurred her vision and burned as they streamed down her cheek...
- July 27th, 2010, 4:30 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Thorough is a must! Maybe a group?
- Replies: 14
- Views: 7209
Re: Thorough is a must! Maybe a group?
I've done some critiquing, and I find that I tend to concentrate on flow and making sure that whatever parameters you're using in your world stay true to themselves. In other words, if something strikes a false note, I'll let you know. I would like someone to do the same for mine. I have finished tw...
- July 5th, 2010, 8:53 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Another Query attempt
- Replies: 25
- Views: 8479
Re: Another Query attempt
Vitiosus, the dark warrior prince, is feared by all of Lassertian. But in this war-loving land, where the lesser humans are hunted and hung, Vitiosus secretly longs for something no warrior would ever consider - peace. Good start. All Vitiosus’ life the King punished him for his mercy until one day ...
- July 4th, 2010, 3:08 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - 'When Sleeping Girls Wake'
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4633
Re: Query - 'When Sleeping Girls Wake'
It isn’t easy to stand by and watch as others criticize, i.e. rip apart, your lovingly crafted children…I mean…sentences. I must admit, however, that you have all made some valid points, and I appreciate the effort. By the way, the title is a play on the old saw, ‘Let sleeping dogs lie’. So, let’s t...
- July 3rd, 2010, 11:10 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - 'When Sleeping Girls Wake'
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4633
Query - 'When Sleeping Girls Wake'
This has been through several revisions. I'd appreciate any help or comments to get to a final version. Thanks, in advance. Dear Agent; David Harvey has a college degree, but no prospects, no interests, and a dead end job as a cashier in a grocery store. Then he discovers an extraordinary coin that ...
- July 2nd, 2010, 4:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: No Hill Without Treasure - Query *NEW*
- Replies: 14
- Views: 4876
Re: No Hill Without Treasure - Query
Hi all, any input you're willing to give would be greatly appreciated! ---- The deadly Shahadán have been released into the world, and it’s all Tsenian Windrunner’s fault. Nice opening. Now he must defy a prophecy and collect the forbidden treasures of Evantar in order to set things right. His missi...
- July 2nd, 2010, 4:17 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Help - DIE AGAIN!!!!!
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2200
Re: Query Help - DIE AGAIN!!!!!
Hello all, i am new here and am going to spend some time later on today and over the weekend and try and give some helpful feedback on other queries here. I am having a hard time with the process so i will do my best to say things that are useful. I just finished my novel DIE AGAIN and had a rough q...
- July 2nd, 2010, 12:26 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
- Replies: 22
- Views: 7856
Re: Alamandine's Song Query
Alamandine “Mandi” Croach is a half-faery princess, the next in line for the crown of the Star Court in Faelyn. Her younger half-brother has been kidnapped and even the strongest seekers cannot find him. But she doesn't know any of that. She doesn't know he's been kidnapped? Or of his existence at ...
- June 14th, 2010, 5:15 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 183281
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Mr. Bransford; David Harvey has a college degree, but no prospects, no interests, and a dead end job as a cashier in a grocery store. Then he discovers an extraordinary coin that answers questions with sounds that no one else can hear. Those answers lead him and his friend Susan on a hunt throu...