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by Calliopenjo
October 1st, 2010, 12:09 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: What's your favorite song that tells a story?
Replies: 58
Views: 13796

Re: What's your favorite song that tells a story?

http://youtu.be/_K6Y-YGZUec

This is my choice.
Reba MacIntyre: Fancy
by Calliopenjo
August 27th, 2010, 3:36 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 8/27/10
Replies: 27
Views: 20054

Re: Page Critique Friday 8/27/10

TITLE: 'APOSTLE' GENRE: CRIME WORDCOUNT: 250 A white Transit van pulls into a long straight ( How long is long? Show us the length instead of telling .)road by the town park, slows for the speed bumps, then indicates right. Pulls into a small car park in front of the two-story honeystone building t...
by Calliopenjo
June 9th, 2010, 4:21 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 274099

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Archipelago Genre: Fantasy Author: Calliopenjo Thank you, Nathan. ========== Alabaster Tower, home of Empress Belphoebe, sat on the western shores of Medaya. It was one of the northern islands of Titalayo. She made her way to council chambers hoping for an update on the slave rebellion and th...
by Calliopenjo
March 19th, 2010, 9:48 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: The importance (and difficulty) of gestures
Replies: 55
Views: 22418

Re: The importance (and difficulty) of gestures

I don't write in gestures unless that's how the character communicates or it's really pertinent at the point in time. I express my emotions with dialogue, thought, body language. . .

Someone walking along the seashore at sunset, watching their feet leave imprints in the sand I think says something.
by Calliopenjo
March 5th, 2010, 4:00 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Share your opening sentence!
Replies: 236
Views: 38753

Re: Share your opening sentence!

The snow covered streets are practically deserted. From my slow going wip, a mystery. I'd give it a seven. It sets it up but it seems to drop suddenly. However, mine isn't much better. This is from my ongoing WIP fantasy. On the ground floor of Alabaster Tower, the Medayan Council waited for their ...
by Calliopenjo
February 24th, 2010, 9:00 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: NPR Contest--Finished with a Video! 2/26 update
Replies: 5
Views: 1120

Re: NPR 600 Word Story Contest

Hug this Man By Ryan Chin Brown haired Becky likes staying in bed until noon. Short but cute Carey likes cooking and long walks. Holly? Could this be the same Holly who told me she found someone? I exhale. The air grabs at my throat and my heart settles into an expanding void. It is her; she was ju...
by Calliopenjo
February 22nd, 2010, 6:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Scatter: Post Edits (Lit Fic)
Replies: 3
Views: 871

Re: Scatter: Post Edits (Lit Fic)

It’s wrong, it’s weird and it’s dangerous. That’s what Cal Painter tells herself every time her heart skips at the sight, touch or sound of Jan Bond.( I'm thinking this should be another paragraph. ) Blue-blooded and charismatic, Cal is a fixture of admiration and fascination in Miles, Kentucky, an...
by Calliopenjo
February 22nd, 2010, 3:51 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
Replies: 21
Views: 6394

Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?

Hi there everyone, I'm seeking a critique partner. I am a newbie and have been at this for a little over three years now. I write fantasy and a little sci-fi. At present, I have a WIP in need of a second look. How much we exchange can be discussed later. I can't promise to be nice but I will be hone...
by Calliopenjo
February 19th, 2010, 8:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: 100 Wishes - Romance novel Query - Take 1
Replies: 19
Views: 3060

Re: 100 Wishes - Romance novel Query - Take 1

Dear Super Agent, Salina Edwards is devastated ( Show Salina being devastated. Ex: Salina Edwards couldn't eat or sleep since her boyfriend of five years died. The reflection in the mirror revealed a gaunt woman with baggy eyes. Something to show her reaction. )when her boyfriend of five years, Nic...
by Calliopenjo
February 18th, 2010, 10:51 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: 100 Wishes - Romance novel Query - Take 1
Replies: 19
Views: 3060

Re: 100 Wishes - Romance novel Query - Take 1

Dear Super Agent, When Salina’s 25 year old boyfriend Nick passes away, she Salina is left with nothing but a stupid list. It contains one hundred wishes he wants her to complete while she mourns. Salina decides she must fulfill the one hundred wishes in order to put Nick’s soul to rest. ( Show thi...
by Calliopenjo
February 12th, 2010, 9:21 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First few paragraphs of my YA Fantasy...
Replies: 12
Views: 2575

Re: First few paragraphs of my YA Fantasy...

Vitiosus lifted his dark sword into the air; the metal blade coated in venom reflected the rays of sunlight. Vitiosus’ heart was pounding and he tensed all his muscles, waiting for an attack. Levion’s sword pushed against Vitiosus’s, sparks flying as the blades scraped against one another.( Be caref...
by Calliopenjo
February 12th, 2010, 12:53 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Beweary of this Query
Replies: 3
Views: 949

Re: Beweary of this Query

Dear Nathan, An Amber Alert is placed for Serena Crazyhorse; an orphaned, stubborn, and defiant ‘tween-ager. Who satiated her wanderlust by reading the notoriously banned book, Spaceschool.com. Everyone who reads it disappears, Serena included. But where do they go? I'm reading telling here. Show t...
by Calliopenjo
February 12th, 2010, 12:36 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Please Help
Replies: 8
Views: 1515

Re: Query - Please Help

Mr. Agent, Nina, on the brink of suicide, is desperate for a shred of hope. Sebastian, the pastor’s son of mega church One Hope vies to be that shred. However, Nina’s lack of belief causes a battle within the church walls. When Nina almost dies the two are brought closer together, but will it be en...
by Calliopenjo
January 4th, 2010, 4:03 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Guide to querying an agent
Replies: 1
Views: 587

Guide to querying an agent

I'm not sure where exactly to put this, but I thought just for info sake this is a good article to read. It covers befriending an agent on a social networking site, explaining the do's and don'ts. http://www.guidetoliteraryagents.com/blog/Protocol+And+Expectations+When+Contacting+And+Befriending+Lit...
by Calliopenjo
December 16th, 2009, 6:23 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: So...Star Wars or Star Trek?
Replies: 45
Views: 10945

Re: So...Star Wars or Star Trek?

All of Star Wars and all of Star Trek.