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by ZWarr
June 16th, 2010, 12:19 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
Replies: 21
Views: 3418

Re: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query

Wow! Talk about a dramatic improvement! This is much more clear, and compelling. I do (of course!) have a few suggestions. First, in the first line I think you either need three examples, or a 'and' bridge and then a period before going to the child. That would have better flow. Also, the transition...
by ZWarr
June 15th, 2010, 12:28 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: "Boy books"
Replies: 17
Views: 2796

Re: "Boy books"

Interesting discussion, especially the bits about the screening of books possibly watering down the material, so boys may be less likely to voluntarily read. Or that's how I'd summarize it, anyway. Someone mentioned boys not choosing books with a female protagonist, and while I agree that it's not a...
by ZWarr
June 14th, 2010, 9:33 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 614
Views: 181835

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hello to all my fellow noobs and veterans of the board. I'm a writer--astonishing, I know--and happy to have gotten over my lurking habit to post in the forums. It was the contests that finally drew me out. Huzzah for contests! I've lived all over the US and would like to extend that to the world. I...
by ZWarr
June 14th, 2010, 8:40 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 116362

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Mr. Bransford, I am seeking representation for my mid-grade urban fantasy novel, 13 DEMON DAYS, which is complete at 55,000 words. 13 Demon Days blends the dark and powerful family inheritance of the Artemis Fowl books with the whimsy and magical wonder of Fablehaven. Josh and Liz Raven are 13-...
by ZWarr
June 11th, 2010, 9:00 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 271902

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: 13 Demon Days Genre: MG Urban Fantasy Words: 244 Josh stood beside Liz on the front porch and watched the cars pull away, but he didn’t wave goodbye. Liz could smile and flutter her hands if she wanted to, just as if their birthday hadn’t been another disaster and the guests a bunch of bully ...