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- October 9th, 2010, 8:35 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Novel Idea feedback
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3334
Re: Novel Idea feedback
Polymath, thank you so much for the observations. I think I need to amp up the conflict in the story, or you're right, there's not enough going on for a novel-sized work. I'm realizing after my first book that its good to give the second lots of plot - along the lines of conflict and characters befo...
- October 9th, 2010, 2:53 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Novel Idea feedback
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3334
Novel Idea feedback
So, I wrote a quick blurb of a novel I'm considering writing. The problem? I keep waffling back and forth on my idea. At one point, I love it, then I hate it, then I wonder if I need to raise the stakes, then I wonder if I should write from both female and male viewpoints (which I've never done. My ...
- October 9th, 2010, 2:17 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4634
Re: Query - Amor for Love - Women's Fiction
Hi Julie! I just wanted to say hello because my book sounds a bit like yours, haha. Mine is about a broadcast journalist who runs away to San Miguel de Allende, Mexico, where a horse trainer/Juilliard trained singer helps her come to terms with her past and learn to love. I also lived in Central Mex...
Re: Nanowrimo
This may be a silly question. I'm thinking of doing NaNoWrMo, but I'm not sure if I want to wait another three weeks to start on my book. Is this challenge for starting a book at the beginning, or is the challenge to get 50,000 words? If the latter, I could start on it now and then churn the heck ou...
- September 24th, 2010, 11:28 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
- Replies: 21
- Views: 8102
Re: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
Thanks for all the wonderful comments and feedback!! I'm going to get cracking on yet another version :)
- September 23rd, 2010, 5:11 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
- Replies: 21
- Views: 8102
Re: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
Thanks so much for your help SGF! I do need to work more on the actual conflict in the book - which is a lingering ex-boyfriend, a prejudiced mother, and Isabelle's own issues with Arturo (ie, his job, his ex-wife, his not pursing his dreams of singing). Ack its so hard combining a book full of prob...
- September 23rd, 2010, 4:42 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: The Coming YA
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3754
Re: The Coming YA
Hi Shadow. Nice scene! It has a good pace, good description, and makes me want to read more. It's always good to have the reader wondering what will happen next. I will correct some more grammar below using red (my best try at correcting grammar), plus my opinions on some of the sentences. ---------...
- September 23rd, 2010, 4:03 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for a Fantasy novel 3rd Draft!!
- Replies: 17
- Views: 5824
Re: Query for a Fantasy novel.
Hi Debra. Queries are so difficult, so good first try. I'm no expert on queries, mine also has gone through tons of revisions and still needs work. I do have some comments, though. First of all, this query left me with more questions than answers. Why does Emma land in the arms of a vampire? Why doe...
- September 23rd, 2010, 3:51 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Fantasy novel 1st page
- Replies: 12
- Views: 6684
Re: Fantasy novel 1st page
I noticed that some other posters commented on your descriptions, but I really liked them! I love reading books that describe things in a way I wouldn't normally think of. I thought that gave your writing strength and originality. I'll go through and give you my comments within your first page. Over...
- September 23rd, 2010, 3:42 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First 250 words
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4271
Re: First 250 words
Hi Amanda! I think the plot of your story sounds enticing, but I have some suggestions for the first 250 words. First of all, I would strike your first sentence and really delve right into the action. Let us get to know the main character and what he is thinking and feeling as they walk down this mo...
- September 23rd, 2010, 3:30 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
- Replies: 21
- Views: 8102
Re: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
Here is my updated version - September 23rd!! (beginning, tailored to each agent, includes title and word count, which is 80,000) It seems like news reporter Isabelle Martin has it all. A job at a top radio station in Seattle. A handsome, well-off boyfriend who wants to get married. But something’s...
- July 16th, 2010, 2:22 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Don't Come to the House Tonight
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3974
Re: Don't Come to the House Tonight
I just wanted to say that I really like your writing. It's snappy, fun, clever and kept me interested and engaged. I totally skipped the prologue though. I don't usually like prologues because I'm so eager to get into the meat of the story. When books have prologues, it takes all I have to make myse...
- July 16th, 2010, 12:53 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Whom do you write like?
- Replies: 53
- Views: 22649
Re: Whom do you write like?
This is hilarious!! One of my WIP's came out like Stephen King, the other like David Foster Wallace. I think my first one came out like King because it had several expletives. hahahaha.
- July 12th, 2010, 2:28 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Genre Help
- Replies: 15
- Views: 5469
Re: Genre Help
I was also confused about the difference between women's fiction and romance. My book is a love story based in San Miguel de Allende, Mexico, which is written in the first person and chronicles one woman's journey to opening her heart to a man she never thought she could love. It's really more about...
- June 30th, 2010, 4:22 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: MAN OF THE HOUSE - 1st Ch.- Critiques Anyone?
- Replies: 10
- Views: 4519
Re: MAN OF THE HOUSE - 1st Ch.- Critiques Anyone?
This is such a dark, disturbing, well-written passage. I disagree with the previous poster and really like the adjectives. I felt like I was there with this boy, in a war-torn country, on the banks of a dirty river filled with bodies. I thought your descriptions helped put me there. Good job!