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- June 2nd, 2017, 12:40 am
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 208
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Re: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Title: In Work Genre: YA Sci-fi Planet Gali Mila would hack into the academy’s artificial intelligence computer tonight. No second thoughts, though yes, there was some guilt. She made her way towards the lab complex with a forced blank expression, periodically gazing at the campus grounds, as though...
- November 12th, 2010, 9:42 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Page Critique Friday 11/12/10
- Replies: 16
- Views: 92420
Re: Page Critique Friday 11/12/10
First, congratulations for being selected and thanks for your submission. I like the protagonist. She is believable. In addition, knowing that the submission is a paranormal romance intrigues me and makes me want to know more. I do think that the writing needs some tightening. Here are some suggesti...
- June 9th, 2010, 10:29 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
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- Views: 452639
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
TITLE: Nuvelium Chase GENRE: YA Science Fiction Adventure Word Count: 250 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ CHAPTER 1: ASIG Planet Karpathia Kamiboo Military Prep Space Academy Lab ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The signal that shimmered on Trompetina’s ho...