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by Ce3
June 19th, 2017, 2:49 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 46
Views: 22761

Re: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

working title: Choice and Consequence Genre: Suspense, thriller There may be more difficult places to find a parking spot in the city but Lucas Jackson could not imagine where. Because he woke up late, had a knock-down drag out with the lovely, sarcastic, and quite irrational Betsy on the front porc...
by Ce3
July 6th, 2012, 7:23 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

The Paris Affair novel (opening page) The multitude of tourists passing by might think her aloof as she listened in her quiet demure manner to the rotund tour guide’s passionate account of the celebrated Rose Window of Our Lady of Paris. The cathedral, better known as Notre Dame de Paris, has been o...
by Ce3
July 1st, 2011, 7:13 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Fiction Title: An Ominous Obession Since the day he hit the big 4-0, Paul ‘Cookie’ Cooke had found sleep as evasive as his wife’s womanly charms and once again tonight, at 1:59 AM., Paul set aside the article he had been perusing featuring ‘Girls of the Big 12’ and rolled his rotund body out of bed....
by Ce3
April 21st, 2011, 5:36 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Blood Money genre: Fiction/thriller If Jonathan Byrd loved anything, it was a challenge, but the task of removing a six dollar flashlight from its impenetrable ‘made-in-china’ plastic seal was creating more stress than usual. In fact, this normally peaceful man appeared on the verge of a nerv...
by Ce3
February 27th, 2011, 2:41 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Blood Money Genre: Popular fiction Word count: 254 Jonathan Byrd loves a challenge but appeared to be on the verge of a nervous collapse, not because he can’t seem to remove the hard plastic protective covering on the ten dollar ‘made in china’ flashlight he just purchased, but because his pa...
by Ce3
October 22nd, 2010, 8:44 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Page Critique Friday 10/22/10

Fiction 248 words Hi Nathan, Attached is my 'hopeful critique page' of my novel about a feuding oil families from Oklahoma. thanks for your great blog and the info you graciously provide, Ce3 It was a star-filled mountain summer night when Nicholas Doucette spotted her in Puff’s Place, that infamous...
by Ce3
August 26th, 2010, 1:35 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: The Money Shot genre: Fiction thriller Jonathan ‘Fuzzy’ Byrd had fled his former life nearly three years ago tonight. This grueling ‘life on the run ’had effectively shattered his ‘ Life of Leisure' dream, for being a wanted man offered few peaceful moments. Were they lurking behind the next ...
by Ce3
August 26th, 2010, 1:01 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Valley of the Blue Genre: Fiction (thriller) Dear Nathan, Enclosed is the beginning (and maybe prologue-even though I know you don't care for them) of my new novel set in the Oklahoma oil fields and Colorado mountains. Thanks for offering the opportunity for a critique. C Loomis Big Stu Valen...
by Ce3
August 2nd, 2010, 9:29 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Nathan, Enclosed is my one page critique. Thank you for all you do to help us poor souls who think we can write. Court Loomis Title: Living With a Positive Power (Do you believe in Miracles) Genre: Non-fiction Two days after a Heart Transplant was indisputably declared my future, I settled into...
by Ce3
June 19th, 2010, 12:10 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 120388

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Living With a Positive Power Non-fiction Two days after a Heart Transplant was indisputably declared my future, I settled into a coarse hardwood chair located in the congested St. Paul’s Heart and Lung Transplant Center’s sterile waiting room. I was waiting my turn― over two hours now and cou...
by Ce3
June 9th, 2010, 7:35 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283375

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

I remember well the night Nicholas Doucette spotted her in Puff’s Place, that wild Rocky Mountain bar with a curious name. We’d been fishing just over the pass, in a spot once ranked the top gold medal trout stream in the lower 48. We practiced ‘catch and release’ but also tucked a few rainbows in t...