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by informalhospital
June 15th, 2021, 8:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: YA Speculative Fiction
Replies: 1
Views: 113

Query: YA Speculative Fiction

Dear [Agent’s Name], A time traveler, a pretty boy, a mind reader, and a speedster, have one goal: break into their university’s high-security lab to uncover the truth behind the Activation. The Activation – a supernatural gift from an alien civilization – allows one percent of the human population ...
by informalhospital
June 15th, 2021, 8:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Fantasy: The Son of Ashes
Replies: 1
Views: 607

Re: Query Fantasy: The Son of Ashes

Hello, I like that you are starting with your protagonist, but I think your query would benefit from more specificity. For example, I am confused by the second line of your query. At first, you say Leon is a shut-in, which makes me think it's his choice to isolate himself, but then in the next line ...
by informalhospital
June 15th, 2021, 8:14 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: YA High Fantasy
Replies: 2
Views: 306

Re: Query: YA High Fantasy

Hello, The biggest thing that jumps out to me is your query doesn't feel specific enough. I feel like I am getting the gist of high fantasy, and not your particular story/sense of stakes. Here is what I mean: Now, in those nations, the hero's apprentice, Theo, struggles to fill his mentor's shoes. W...
by informalhospital
February 20th, 2021, 8:45 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner/Group: Fantasy
Replies: 1
Views: 496

Re: Looking for a Critique Partner/Group: Fantasy

Hello, I'm pretty much in the same boat. I finished my first draft and could use another pair of eyes. My story is YA low fantasy/some sci-fi elements, 88K. It is multiple-POV. If you like my excerpt enough, post some of yours, and we can exchange! This character is gender-neutral, just FYI: “It is ...